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    Unhappy As I Lay Here To Die........!!!

    well as I lay here to die
    of a broken heart
    my days on the earth are fading ,
    passing like the wind
    I’m still think of how my life was going to be.....
    was it going to be a wonderful life?
    or a life of my own?
    or ever a life of happiness?
    was my life wasted in the last 15 years?
    or did I have o good life ,
    did I make an impact on some ones life,
    why so soon do I have to go ,
    I have so many questions to how .......
    my story could have ended,
    was I to find true love
    was I to have a family .........................
    maybe I was not meant to be on the earth ,
    no one cares if I’m gone ,
    no one loves a cutter ,
    so my place on the earth is
    fading a quick as it came ,
    to every one I have ever healed dear to me
    I will miss you all,
    you may not fell the same ,
    but plz don’t cry when I’m gone,
    and don’t yell why her,
    don’t even say I will miss you
    till the end because deep in my heart
    I know no one cares,
    not even those who I think would care,
    I have love and lost that now
    I am just a drifter trying to find a
    way in the world ,
    maybe I will never find my way not even ......
    In the after life,
    as I’m fading
    my life good and bad memories are.........
    passing through my head ,
    why did God put me on this earth,
    why has every one hated me so much ,
    what did I do wrong to them,
    but I’m realizing that every one cares about me and wants to see me do good ...
    but now it is just to late for all of that
    now i laye in a pool of blood......
    now my life is no more.
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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    Re: As I Lay Here To Die........!!!

    Correct capitalization and spacing would make this a readable poem. I mean, humans hate to read long paragraphs.
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    well i if you dont like how i do my work then stop reading thnem plz

    and i know i cant spell. and all the other stuff just get off my back plz i will lear the way i want to not how other want me to so plz just stop

    i mean come on. iam not the best yopu can find i just put yhings togeter that i fell so ya
    Last edited by Kasai; Feb 18, 2007 at 06:46 AM. Reason: Double posting is against the rules.
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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    Re: As I Lay Here To Die........!!!

    Quote Originally Posted by inuyashagurl View Post
    well i if you dont like how i do my work then stop reading thnem plz

    and i know i cant spell. and all the other stuff just get off my back plz i will lear the way i want to not how other want me to so plz just stop

    i mean come on. iam not the best yopu can find i just put yhings togeter that i fell so ya
    First of all, as a writer you should be able to take positive criticism and negative criticism. And secondly, you should learn and want to spell correctly and use the correct punctuatuion. It makes you seem intelligent.

    And if you just put things together and call it poetry? Then you are not a writer of poetry.

    And try to make your posts readable.
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    Re: As I Lay Here To Die........!!!

    you know what i am really geting tired of you iam srry that ism freaking stupid but ya we cant all have big brains so plz just get of my back. and i am one of those writer that cant tack when ppl dis me. and my just puting this togethher seems to work when i have enterd 10 of my pomes in a school thing and came in 2cd out of 50 so dont even
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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