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    I lost

    lost my way
    I lost my self
    I lost my life
    I lost my soul..
    I lost into myself...
    I went to any other way...
    I found out that I lost myself into your blissful world
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: I lost

    You rarely see the anaphor. This was a very good example of a style most find awkward. There was a time when all your poems were the same. You have shown remarkable improvement!
    Last edited by beast; Mar 30, 2010 at 02:56 PM.

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    Re: I lost

    Quote Originally Posted by receiverofhell View Post
    lost my way
    I lost my self
    I lost my life
    I lost my soul..
    I lost into myself...
    I went to any other way...
    I found out that I lost myself into your blissful world
    i have not read much of your work but from what i gather you are still learning you are doing good keep it up and try all styles
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Re: I lost

    THANK YOU!...as you know I have been busy with school works projects..etc..
    But know it's vacation time!
    I write poems again this time..
    THANKS ALOT to bot of you
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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