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Reply With QuoteThe emotion of your loved one not being there is very clear in this poem, the only thing I would suggest structure wise would be to break it into stanzas between your and time, but other than that good job!
Any moment I could burst into tears
I feel so lonely without you here
Without you by my side
I miss you all the time
Your voice keeps me satisfied
I miss you every second your gone
You're my only real friend
To love and hold you is what I want
I need to know your doing fine
I want to speak to you
To hear you say you miss me too
Will you visit me tonight?
The emotion of your loved one not being there is very clear in this poem, the only thing I would suggest structure wise would be to break it into stanzas between your and time, but other than that good job!
nice poem that was pretty emotional. nice job.
Nice poem Star Girl. Keep it up.
Hmm. I didnt really enjoy the rhyme of the poem.
Seduced by Flesh
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