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    I Miss You

    Any moment I could burst into tears
    I feel so lonely without you here
    Without you by my side
    I miss you all the time
    Your voice keeps me satisfied
    I miss you every second your gone
    You're my only real friend
    To love and hold you is what I want

    I need to know your doing fine
    I want to speak to you
    To hear you say you miss me too
    Will you visit me tonight?

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    Re: I Miss You

    The emotion of your loved one not being there is very clear in this poem, the only thing I would suggest structure wise would be to break it into stanzas between your and time, but other than that good job!

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    Re: I Miss You

    nice poem that was pretty emotional. nice job.

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    Re: I Miss You

    Nice poem Star Girl. Keep it up.

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    Re: I Miss You

    Hmm. I didnt really enjoy the rhyme of the poem.
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