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    i need a little help

    i am writing a vampire poem and a need a little help to finish. here is what i have so far... if i get any further i will edit this.

    To what do I owe the pleasure
    Your face outside my window
    Ghastly white like fresh fallen snow
    Your alluring eyes grip my soul

    I leave my bed and I open my window
    Allowing you entrance upon my threshold
    Your eyes hold mine in a transfixed gaze
    My fate is sealed in an endless maze

    You come close to me
    Your warm breath upon my cheek
    I feel the sharpness of your fangs
    As they graze the jaw-line of my neck

    They slowly sink into my flesh
    As pale as the moon on a summer night
    Crimson fluid spills down my chest
    Life as I know it is drained from my nack

    Slowly the room begins to fade
    I start to slide from your embrace
    I collapse to the floor harldy conscious
    I'm so weak I'm barely breathing

    Your shadow falls across me
    As I lay there in the dark
    Your voice an echo in my head
    Last edited by hyuuga13; Aug 29, 2006 at 12:56 PM.
    Why is everything so ****ing hard for me? Keep me down to what you think I should be! Must you tempt me and provoke the ministry? Keep on trying I'm not dying so easily!

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    Re: i need a little help

    Oh,so you like vampies,well me too...but be sure of your words....especially the bad words your putting to....Bad words doesn't fit well in poems you know....that's all....

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    Re: i need a little help

    Quote Originally Posted by hyuuga13 View Post
    i am writing a vampire poem and a need a little help to finish. here is what i have so far... if i get any further i will edit this.

    To what do I owe the pleasure
    Your face outside my window
    Ghastly white like fresh fallen snow
    Your alluring eyes grip my soul

    I leave my bed and I open my window
    Allowing you entrance upon my threshold
    Your eyes hold mine in a transfixed gaze
    My fate is sealed in an endless maze

    You come close to me
    Your warm breath upon my cheek
    I feel the sharpness of your fangs
    As they graze the jaw-line of my neck

    They slowly sink into my flesh
    As pale as the moon on a summer night
    Crimson fluid spills down my chest
    Life as I know it is drained from my nack

    Slowly the room begins to fade
    well one sugggestion is
    "while im lost within your eyes slowley your craving begins to die"
    lol

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