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    I ran.

    I ran. And, I'm not usually one to move very fast.
    But, I ran to my future... all the way from my past.

    My past.... all the things I miss so much.
    My past. So far. So far. Too far to touch.

    So, I kept running. My past kept fading.
    And I can't re-live it. Because its not waiting.

    I ran through this moment. Ran right past me.
    And, I ran toward the things I wanted to be.

    I skipped the small steps, and ran through my problems.
    I ran through my dilemmas before I could solve them.

    I thought "As long as I'm running, how can I fall?"
    Because I'm running in place up against a brick wall.

    You can't run to the future, because it is unknown.
    Your shoes took off without you, and they're running alone.

    They left you behind. With your poor, aching feet.
    Because you can't catch up, you just feel defeat.

    Please do not waste time trying to figure out how.
    Focus on this moment. Right here. Right now.

    Make the best of this moment. Make it work. Make it fun.
    If you live for today.... Then you wont want to run.
    Last edited by Peach_follows; Oct 28, 2007 at 07:46 PM. Reason: there, they're, their... I always get them confused.
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    Re: I ran.

    rele nice poem. the way your stanza's were ordered and presented gave me the feeling that each stanza was faiding away, like a bad memory. rele liked your ideas, but try a more complex rhyming style. it will make your poem sound more profound, and it will make it easier to imput ideas to the readers. u'll be surprised at the wonders you can do. rele liked this poem. keep up the good writing Peach

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    Re: I ran.

    *sings it so much easier to run by linkin park*

    A nicely made poem I like the flow and the way you wrote this poem... a nice style showing as if you regretted running... keep it up ^^

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    Re: I ran.

    nice!!so nice!i really enjoyed it!it really makes a lot of sense!good job!!and keep it up!
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    Re: I ran.

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    If you live for today.... Then you wont want to run.
    Truer words were never spoken/written. The wording of your poem is really beautiful. It made the tone really...reassuring.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    An absolutely beautiful poem. Heh, it made me visualize something pleasant while reading your poem. Good work overall. =D

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    Re: I ran.

    @ RayMe: I regret running... but I've only slowed down. I have yet to stop completely and live in the moment. I manage to do it from time to time, but I always re-visit my past or worry about the future

    @Bratling: Thank you. I've been really trying to focus on staying in the present. And when I'm successful it helps tremendously.

    Thank you everyone else for the feedback. I appreciate the time you all took to look it over.
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    Re: I ran.

    You know... I've noticed that aswell. However I have the unhealthy added habit of not addressing some of the current issues, letting them be ignored entierly. Congradulations none the less on your headway.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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