+ Reply to Thread
Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast
Results 1 to 8 of 10

Thread: I ran over Roland.

  1. #1
    Devoted Otaku Nympho may be famous one day Nympho may be famous one day Nympho's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    I get bored easily
    Posts
    523
    Thanks
    1
    Thanked 6 Times in 4 Posts

    I ran over Roland.

    This is about the simplist piece of crap poem i have written. Adding it took about a minute and 10 seconds to write. I just want to spill a little. Probably sounds like every other bad relationship poem out there.

    Walk away
    I try to say to myself
    That this is the last time
    Say over and over again
    That we can make this work
    Trust in you
    That you wont hurt me
    But every time
    I’m fooled
    I must be the fool
    To think that you
    Could ever respect me
    Or even a chance that you could ever
    Love me again

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

  2. #2
    Fish Fingers & Custard Ice Hockey Champion, Smaugs Treasure Champion, Mini Putt 3 Champion, Ant Tracks Champion, Jungle Hunt Champion, Madnetics Champion, Manole Champion, Blokken Champion, Fast Food Fiasco Champion, Shapes Hifters Champion, Mud and Blood: Vietnam Champion HolderOfTheDarkChalice is making a name for themselves HolderOfTheDarkChalice is making a name for themselves HolderOfTheDarkChalice's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2006
    Location
    someplace where the only light is the moon above
    Posts
    3,118
    Thanks
    102
    Thanked 70 Times in 64 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    i like how you hate flows through this poem saying you
    are the fool for fallign for his lies. its true every relationship needs respect
    and you pointed that out very well here awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

  3. #3
    Devoted Otaku Nympho may be famous one day Nympho may be famous one day Nympho's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    I get bored easily
    Posts
    523
    Thanks
    1
    Thanked 6 Times in 4 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    Your not supposed to like it Chalice!!!!!

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

  4. #4
    Ever So Awesome Kaboom Champion, Archery Champion, Crazy Pool 2 Champion, Ninja-Boy Champion, Bubble Shooter Champion zyta may be famous one day zyta may be famous one day zyta's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Location
    Arizona
    Posts
    898
    Thanks
    6
    Thanked 37 Times in 34 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    it is too straight forward, lack of depth and imagry. of course it was rushed so you get a freebie there...it just seemed like random thoughts putting down with no real meaning in them.

    Visit my blog: Rewriting Life

  5. #5
    Devoted Otaku Nympho may be famous one day Nympho may be famous one day Nympho's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    I get bored easily
    Posts
    523
    Thanks
    1
    Thanked 6 Times in 4 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    How very correct you are! I wasnt looking for it to be added to my awesome masterpieces! Like i said, this is poo, and there for we must throw poo at it!

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

  6. #6
    Banned Vincent_the_Victorious may be famous one day Vincent_the_Victorious may be famous one day Vincent_the_Victorious's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2006
    Location
    Right Freakin' Here!!
    Posts
    129
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    Only monkies throw poo. This poem is, as you said, like many others before it. It is not completely crap. It is a little short, but add some body and PRESTO! You have another great work.

  7. #7
    You's Trollin Pro Leafblower Champion, Helicopter Champion ketaro is making a name for themselves ketaro is making a name for themselves ketaro's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2005
    Posts
    4,293
    Thanks
    30
    Thanked 38 Times in 36 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    I wouldn't call this poem a piece of crap, it was a kool poem, keep it up nympho.

  8. #8
    Otaku Dark_Ichigo_X may be famous one day Dark_Ichigo_X may be famous one day Dark_Ichigo_X's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Location
    section 9
    Posts
    200
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts

    Re: I ran over Roland.

    liked it doing good keep it up. :>

+ Reply to Thread
Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts