Thread: I Replied, "No."

Don't say that. It's worth reading. I enjoyed it alot, it had a smooth flow and tempo really made me enjoy the poem even more. There aren't any mistakes I can see. As always good job ^^ Hope to see more from you.

I thought this was interesting. During the first part I expected it to be flat and to be a let down as far as poetry goes. But I was plesantly suprised to find a lot of feeling and great wording towards the end.

Well, I wanted the first part to be really blunt. The speaker does not really get a chance to explain his feelings until the end when they ask him why; some people (like me) don't like going into mushy details, but are just as passionate as Lord Byron, you know? I wanted to capture that . . . I don't think I did a very good job, though.

Originally Posted by divine_punishment

Well, I wanted the first part to be really blunt. The speaker does not really get a chance to explain his feelings until the end when they ask him why; some people (like me) don't like going into mushy details, but are just as passionate as Lord Byron, you know? I wanted to capture that . . . I don't think I did a very good job, though.

Well I think you did that fantastically. It DOES seem like some one who has a hard time being mushy expression wise and yet has a lot of emotion and passion. So many boys get type-cast as unemotional and dispassionate meat heads just because they don't or can't clearly convey their feelings.

Hey not bad. I like the simplicity of the poem. The last stanza throughs the flow off a bit.

The last stanza is entirely different because the speaker is finally able to express himself beyond the usual monosyllabic answer. It's supposed to be radically different from the beginning.

Definitely not my best work, but the first I have written in yonks.

Is this the one you were talking about Divine??? I like it. It sounds nice. Its good for one that hasn't written in a while. I wish i could write like that.