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    I See

    my eyes
    watch

    the time passing by
    the day ending

    i see the sun rise
    and i see the night fall

    i see my heart fade
    and i see others hate
    and others love

    walking
    talking

    living
    and dying

    i see
    every drope around me

    but what i hate
    is seeing people
    watching me

    the thing i can not bear
    is their eyes staring at me

    i see their surprise
    when i begin to talk and they listen and see

    i see you happy the moment i cry
    i see you smiling the moment i get hurt

    i hate it when you see me
    becuase when i look back at you
    i see hell in your eyes,,,,
    Power -xxx- aka -M.Ali
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    I Spread My Wings Without A trace

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    Re: I See

    i like how you describe your pain and discust with the guy
    i have been down that road man times and you explained it very well
    i hate it when you see me
    becuase when i look back at your eyes
    i see hell in your eyes,,,,
    ^ that line kicked ass thats a great one liner i will have to
    remember that can i use that as a quote?
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: I See

    i love all ur poems bestest buddy and u know that they are always really good. this one is too but is sad and sounds so angery.
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    I will fight until i find what i'm looking for...you can not judge me on my apperence I am a Warrior. If you have a problem with me..... then my blades will meet your neck.

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    Re: I See

    another awesome poem of yours, i like the way wrote it, it makes the reader to wonder about your feelings.

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    Re: I See

    I like the intro descriptions to the poem...I would have done a similar idea.

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: I See

    pretty good, better than some, but not the best. keep it up.

    thanks to zyta for the sick sig and avy!

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