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    *I smell blood in the air*

    A heavy wind blows,
    I smell blood in the air.

    I follow the smell,
    What I saw was a death in play.

    Father death inside a man that is killing,
    He saw me and I ran he came after me,

    He was fast,
    but I know shortcuts so screw being fast.

    But he got me,
    and my life was ended and I saw death.

    I saw his face with blue orbs inside,
    An I still smell blood in the air.

    The blood was mine,
    It was black.

    Like death's heart and soul if he has a soul,
    I smell blood in the air,
    Its heavier then ever,
    What I saw was a pool of blood and bodies,
    Never follow the smell of blood in the air.
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    Re: *I smell blood in the air*

    WOW! I like how wrote this out in detail to show how you would smell blood. I think it was good. Keep up the good work. can't wait to read more poems from you.

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    Re: *I smell blood in the air*

    hmm...this is a good poem.. love the imagination there.. ^^ nicely done.. but the way poem goes...i dont like it much... :/

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    Smile Re: *I smell blood in the air*

    Well,

    Ok to give my honest opinion, I didn't actually see a pattern in the poem, Though I sort of understoon the situation in this poem. The idea of 'blood in the air' was quite nice and very interesting.

    I personaly like this verse,

    Like death's heart and soul if he has a soul,
    I smell blood in the air,
    Its heavier then ever,
    What I saw was a pool of blood and bodies,
    Never follow the smell of blood in the air.
    Though In the middle of the poem...I quite didn't understand, But the restof the poem was nice .

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    Re: *I smell blood in the air*

    Glad you guys liked this poems to,
    I just made it on the spot without writing it
    on paper first like I woutld do.

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    Re: *I smell blood in the air*

    hmm well in my honest opinion i think you could of took a bit more time and made it a bit better because it wasn't the best poem i read but neither was it the worst but i like the way you write it on smeel of blood

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