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    I Still Don't Know

    I still don't know for sure
    That you will stay with me
    I feel the warmth I have always wanted
    But I feel an emptiness that leaves me saddened
    What can I do
    When I can't talk to you
    You seem to understand
    That I need you to hold my hand
    But in the years to come
    What will be done
    To ensure security
    I won't force you
    You know that I never could
    But in my heart I hope
    That things will always be this way
    But I still don't know
    What the future will hold
    But hope that its you that will open the gateway
    And lead me to heaven
    To save me from this hellish void


    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: I Still Don't Know

    Quote Originally Posted by NevesElocin View Post
    I still don't know for sure
    That you will stay with me
    I feel the warmth I have always wanted
    But I feel an emptiness that leaves me saddened
    What can I do
    When I can't talk to you
    You seem to understand
    That I need you to hold my hand
    But in the years to come
    What will be done
    To ensure security
    I won't force you
    You know that I never could
    But in my heart I hope
    That things will always be this way
    But I still don't know
    What the future will hold
    But hope that its you that will open the gateway
    And lead me to heaven
    To save me from this hellish void

    Nice poem your good and r u published like me or do u write books ??
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    Re: I Still Don't Know

    Very nice poem, Elocin. I enjoyed it. You are confused as to what the future will promise for the both of you. You hope that he will be with you forever, but you don't know. And you're not about to go searching through hell and highwater to find out. What comes, comes. At least that's what I got from the poem.

    This part of the poem is my favorite:

    But I still don't know
    What the future will hold
    But hope that its you that will open the gateway
    And lead me to heaven
    To save me from this hellish void
    Nice work. I hope to read more from you.

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    No actually I'm not published and I don't write books. I just love to write poetry and figured that it would be nice to put something here. I hope that I can enter the Poem of the Month contest someday. Aww shucks wolfy you're making me blush. And thats really deep, you almost completely got why I wrote the poem.

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    A very nice poem u have did,makes u think about the future but eny way i like it.
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    Quote Originally Posted by NevesElocin View Post
    No actually I'm not published and I don't write books. I just love to write poetry and figured that it would be nice to put something here. I hope that I can enter the Poem of the Month contest someday.
    Yeah I have publishe 3 poems ,been in 2 books and won the editors choice award
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    Quote Originally Posted by NevesElocin View Post
    No actually I'm not published and I don't write books. I just love to write poetry and figured that it would be nice to put something here. I hope that I can enter the Poem of the Month contest someday. Aww shucks wolfy you're making me blush. And thats really deep, you almost completely got why I wrote the poem.
    lol, forgive me. I do not mean to make anyone blush. But it truly is a well written poem. And I'm not surprised that I understood almost all of why you wrote it. It is poured out into words. Great job.

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    Re: I Still Don't Know

    Maybe I should do more poems then. What do you think? Am I good enough to keep going or should I quit trying here?

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