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    I tried to tell you

    I Tried to Tell You

    I tried to tell you I love you
    but the words were hard to find.

    I'm always thinking about you
    you're the only one on my mind.

    Oh why do I act so shy forever hiding my face
    I should learn to laugh and not to cry put yourself in my place.

    There were times I tried to kiss you but something told me no.
    You wanted me to hold you but I

    kept letting you go.
    I'm afraid that I am not the girl

    you've searched for all these years.
    I will kindly leave now don't you cry

    try to hold back your tears.
    It's been so long I haven't seen you

    for quite awhile
    When I think of how we me met it only

    brings back your smile.
    I remember when I held you then and

    told you we'd never part
    I loved you then I love you now and

    I'll hold you in my heart.

    <O: hi again, Heres an older poem. comments please!>

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    Re: I tried to tell you

    so much pain in ones heart and well its very compliment to know ones feelings

    anyway good poem and keep it up
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    Re: I tried to tell you

    the last verse was sweet. However, shorter stanzas sometimes isnt appealing in a long poem.
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    Re: I tried to tell you

    very cool poem and i loke how you share your love hoping the hear it knowing they want come back ,wich in some cases is a bad idea but none the less thats what i get from reading this ,very awesome and another poem to add to my file
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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