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    I’ve got my eyes on you

    Look you,
    I don’t like you.
    I don’t like the way you trap girls in your desires.
    Nor do I appreciate you interfering with my love

    I’ve got my eyes on you

    I detest you for what you did to my one and only love
    Not only did you steal her away from me, you made her lie about you
    Not only that; you already had heaps more in store for you
    I despise you for what you’ve been doing and have done.

    I’ve got my eyes on you.

    I’ve got my eyes on you,
    And these aren’t the normal eyes
    They are set on you, with passionate abhorrence,
    Watching your every action and flirty behaviour
    And I’m not going to leave you, either.

    You disgust me, you really do
    And for that I have no respect for you
    Because all you did was impair the sanctity of MY relationship
    And your own, because of your selfish desires

    This is you, I do hope you are offended: -
    “I’m sorry, but I like you as my sister”
    “Yeah, I love you too”
    “Love you too, miss you too”
    To all those different, unsuspecting, foolish women

    For you have just crossed the line with your unacceptable excuses
    You have broken hearts and still continue to do so
    So trust me, if I see you flirting with any more girls and toy with them
    You will be calling your own demise

    For I loathe you for everything you did
    The punishment you will receive, my friend, will be horribly divine.
    So watch out, bastard,

    I have got my eyes on you.
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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    youre online late man @.@ my my... or is it early there?

    @.@ powerful emotion shown there... simple and easily understandable...

    Nicely done man ^^ keep it up

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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    I could've written more but then again ... I don't want to repeat minor ideas again.
    Thank you

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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    I love this poem, it has great emotion and is writen superbly.

    Keep up the great poems, I love reading them.



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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    Ahh, I never get it, I rarely think of my work as "superb" and "great". I guess you all see something that I miss everytime!
    Most of my poems come truly from my heart, and usually take anywhere between 5 - 15 minutes!

    Thank you ^_^

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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    I like how you presented your feelings in the poem. It was well written. Keep up the awesome work. ^^

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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    Ahh, I never get it, I rarely think of my work as "superb" and "great". I guess you all see something that I miss everytime!
    Most of my poems come truly from my heart, and usually take anywhere between 5 - 15 minutes!

    Thank you ^_^
    Thats probally why everyone loves your poems because they come from your heart where as most poems are just made as they go along really.

    I don't know why you can't see the greatness in your poems as all of them i've read are truly amazing.



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    Re: I’ve got my eyes on you

    *looks around* I like it, i mean yeah i do, i just hope you ani't got yoeyes onme.

    Really good poem, really it is

    deep....

    keep it up dude
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