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    I want care for your death

    I hold my breath as you die,
    i count the minutes as you fly,
    nothing can hold you back as
    you say good bye.

    Another moment ticks away as you
    brag about the way you will go away,
    i sound cold or even heartless but know
    i care but hate the sadness you put
    on yourself.

    You take the plunge never to
    return i clap my hand's at your
    demise ,no tears will i shed when
    you throw your life away,hate me
    if you will but giving up sickens me.

    The deed is done i stand alone as
    they put you in the ground,i toss
    a black rose on your grave knowing
    hell is where your at.

    No happy ending for you my friend
    as the flames eat you eternaly,i say
    good bye to you knowing i won't
    do the same over silly love games.
    Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Sep 29, 2006 at 06:11 AM.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    You take the plunge never to
    return i clap my hand's at your
    demise ,no tears will i shed when
    you throw your life away,hate me
    if you will but giving up sickens me.
    ......
    The deed is done i stand alone as
    they put you in the ground,i toss
    a black rose on your grave knowing
    hell is where your at.
    hm.. careless.
    you want to careless but you know you cannot.
    huh.. many people can make you want to do that...
    but, can you...

    hm..

    what is a heart?
    what is a conciousness?
    if we do not know...
    which path will we chose..
    but.. you.. choose both of it
    and so do I.
    is that the last piece of the friendship which had broken...
    that hold you there..
    hold you at the place where you still want to
    ..
    be a friend


    hm...

    my friend, do you realize it.
    do you know that i care you
    but, you....


    _____
    hm... quite the same experience of being like that
    make other people know how it feel.

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    meh~

    The title says it all eh~

    I like the peom, and seeing I know where your thoughts were in this (u_u)

    Lovey..
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    Nice

    I liked it a lot. I would have given up as well. Some people just can't be changed. The poem was very good, shows emotion nicely and I agree with how you felt. You try and try but they give up in the end and get what I suppose they deserve. Very nice, my friend.
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    That was a very dark poem. It sounds like a poem about someone who committed suicide. I liked it and look forward to reading more of your poems.

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    man you becoming emo or something!. Nice poem man it was pretty kool.

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    Wow another awesome poem big bro!!! I really liked it alot.The darkness,hatred and sadness in this poem with sooo awesome!!! Once again awesome job big bro!!!
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    thanks i am glad you liked it i will try another soon but
    right now i am trying a story i will post soon
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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