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    I want to try

    I would lay down my life for you
    But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel
    Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself
    It wouldn't be hard to fight you
    To push away the questions
    Ignore the pleads I can hear in your voice
    But somehow, someway I just don't want to

    I cherish you so much that I just can't hide anything from you
    Some of the time I really want to
    But the words won't stay inside
    They spill forth from my heart and out of my mouth
    Is this what love is?

    No secrets
    The warmth of knowing I belong somewhere
    To someone
    Knowing the hiding is useless
    That is always best to tell you the truth

    But I'm afraid of love
    Afraid to be cared for
    In fear of being wanted
    But I still want to try

    Can you understand the delusions of a fool
    The silly immature words I use
    Dumb questions I can't help wanting to know
    Worries so unfounded

    My heart won't stop fluttering though
    Breathing is so difficult
    I almost feel sick
    But my body floods with heat every time I hear your voice
    A smile so real highlights my features and I become brand new

    Is this what love is?
    This can't be lust
    These feelings i try to lock up and hide
    This has to be real
    This has to be love

    Feelings i've never felt
    That, in truth, I barely understand
    I react without thinking now
    Where is that calm calculating person now?

    Is this my instinct as a woman?
    Or is this still the immature feelings of the girl in me
    Who will never grow up
    Who will never truly understand
    And thus never achieve the real feelings that only a woman could appreciate

    I fear it
    But I want it so badly
    to be madly, madly in love

    For you to be my balm of Gilead
    And soothe away my pain
    To be my solace, my eternal resting place
    The safe place for me to lay my head at night
    Something real for the person who lives in a fantasy

    But I'm still afraid
    But my fear is going away
    Is it wrong to feel this way?
    To want to belong
    No one can tell not to grasp happiness now
    I won't let you slip away
    Last edited by NevesElocin; Oct 26, 2007 at 10:11 AM.

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    Re: I want to try

    oooo dod you read my feelings?lol cause i feel this way about a person1i feel butterflies in my stomach just at the sound of his name!it's a really nice poem i really enjoyed it!good job!keep it up!
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    Finally ! a happy one. ( that is compared to your other ones )

    Just what i have bin waiting for from you as you well know.There were a few spelling mistakes i pointed out to you which you fix'd,besides that it was perfect in my opinion.Allot of emotion and felling when in to it.Very good ! hope to see more of this kind from you.
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    Excellent poem you got here though the parts you described here are indeed affectionate and i like these certain poems that lets you get out these sad emotion as well the interest, and the believe that there is a good feeling about it i admire this poem very much and i would like to see more of your work in the future.

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    OMG................that just stunned me!!!!!!!!!!
    Absolutely wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    I agree with Astaroth. That is what I thought after reading your poem. Keep up the terrific work. ^^

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    "But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel
    Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself"

    I agree with that terribly... there are certain times we have this feelings we dont even understand... and i find it hard expressing it...

    A nice poem there ^^ keep it up

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    wow that poem was so good its probably the best poem that u have done keep up the great work

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