I want to try

NevesElocin · Oct 26, 2007, 09:58 AM

I would lay down my life for you
But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel
Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself
It wouldn't be hard to fight you
To push away the questions
Ignore the pleads I can hear in your voice
But somehow, someway I just don't want to

I cherish you so much that I just can't hide anything from you
Some of the time I really want to
But the words won't stay inside
They spill forth from my heart and out of my mouth
Is this what love is?

No secrets
The warmth of knowing I belong somewhere
To someone
Knowing the hiding is useless
That is always best to tell you the truth

But I'm afraid of love
Afraid to be cared for
In fear of being wanted
But I still want to try

Can you understand the delusions of a fool
The silly immature words I use
Dumb questions I can't help wanting to know
Worries so unfounded

My heart won't stop fluttering though
Breathing is so difficult
I almost feel sick
But my body floods with heat every time I hear your voice
A smile so real highlights my features and I become brand new

Is this what love is?
This can't be lust
These feelings i try to lock up and hide
This has to be real
This has to be love

Feelings i've never felt
That, in truth, I barely understand
I react without thinking now
Where is that calm calculating person now?

Is this my instinct as a woman?
Or is this still the immature feelings of the girl in me
Who will never grow up
Who will never truly understand
And thus never achieve the real feelings that only a woman could appreciate

I fear it
But I want it so badly
to be madly, madly in love

For you to be my balm of Gilead
And soothe away my pain
To be my solace, my eternal resting place
The safe place for me to lay my head at night
Something real for the person who lives in a fantasy

But I'm still afraid
But my fear is going away
Is it wrong to feel this way?
To want to belong
No one can tell not to grasp happiness now
I won't let you slip away

Adriana · Oct 26, 2007, 10:01 AM

oooo dod you read my feelings?lol cause i feel this way about a person1i feel butterflies in my stomach just at the sound of his name!it's a really nice poem i really enjoyed it!good job!keep it up!

*koga23* · Oct 26, 2007, 12:24 PM

Finally ! a happy one. ( that is compared to your other ones )

Just what i have bin waiting for from you as you well know.There were a few spelling mistakes i pointed out to you which you fix'd,besides that it was perfect in my opinion.Allot of emotion and felling when in to it.Very good ! hope to see more of this kind from you.

dark1angel · Oct 26, 2007, 12:42 PM

Excellent poem you got here though the parts you described here are indeed affectionate and i like these certain poems that lets you get out these sad emotion as well the interest, and the believe that there is a good feeling about it i admire this poem very much and i would like to see more of your work in the future.

Astaroth · Oct 27, 2007, 12:07 PM

OMG................that just stunned me!!!!!!!!!!
Absolutely wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tifa Lockhart · Oct 27, 2007, 03:12 PM

I agree with Astaroth. That is what I thought after reading your poem. Keep up the terrific work. ^^

*RayMe* · Oct 27, 2007, 09:16 PM

"But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel
Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself"

I agree with that terribly... there are certain times we have this feelings we dont even understand...

and i find it hard expressing it...

A nice poem there ^^ keep it up

!mveli2 · Oct 27, 2007, 10:35 PM

wow that poem was so good its probably the best poem that u have done keep up the great work

blakjapaneseangl · Oct 28, 2007, 12:12 AM

i like the pom. it's a good romanc poem. but to me i cant fl so in love that i can give my lif for them or do any of the oth stuff said in the poem. i love reading these type of poems but i dont have it in me to perform the poem. please keep on writing i loved it.

Shippo101 · Oct 28, 2007, 05:35 AM

that poem was so far past absolutly wonderfuli simply loved it, the first line caught my eye and the last

was making wish there were more

lol

awesome work keep it up

Oct 26, 2007, 09:58 AM	#1 (permalink)
NevesElocin ~The Mistress~ Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Hell Posts: 699 Thanks: 14 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,272	I want to try I would lay down my life for you But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself It wouldn't be hard to fight you To push away the questions Ignore the pleads I can hear in your voice But somehow, someway I just don't want to I cherish you so much that I just can't hide anything from you Some of the time I really want to But the words won't stay inside They spill forth from my heart and out of my mouth Is this what love is? No secrets The warmth of knowing I belong somewhere To someone Knowing the hiding is useless That is always best to tell you the truth But I'm afraid of love Afraid to be cared for In fear of being wanted But I still want to try Can you understand the delusions of a fool The silly immature words I use Dumb questions I can't help wanting to know Worries so unfounded My heart won't stop fluttering though Breathing is so difficult I almost feel sick But my body floods with heat every time I hear your voice A smile so real highlights my features and I become brand new Is this what love is? This can't be lust These feelings i try to lock up and hide This has to be real This has to be love Feelings i've never felt That, in truth, I barely understand I react without thinking now Where is that calm calculating person now? Is this my instinct as a woman? Or is this still the immature feelings of the girl in me Who will never grow up Who will never truly understand And thus never achieve the real feelings that only a woman could appreciate I fear it But I want it so badly to be madly, madly in love For you to be my balm of Gilead And soothe away my pain To be my solace, my eternal resting place The safe place for me to lay my head at night Something real for the person who lives in a fantasy But I'm still afraid But my fear is going away Is it wrong to feel this way? To want to belong No one can tell not to grasp happiness now I won't let you slip away __________________ My love for you only grows with time...I want to create something beautiful with you. Last edited by NevesElocin; Oct 26, 2007 at 10:11 AM.
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Oct 26, 2007, 10:01 AM	#2 (permalink)
Adriana Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: somewhere nice with the people i love! Posts: 119 Thanks: 1 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 1,735	Re: I want to try oooo dod you read my feelings?lol cause i feel this way about a person1i feel butterflies in my stomach just at the sound of his name!it's a really nice poem i really enjoyed it!good job!keep it up! __________________ Visit my and jessie's story on this link!!hope you like it all http://www.animeonline.net/f101/gate...er-life-31158/
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Oct 26, 2007, 12:24 PM	#3 (permalink)
koga23 ~The Master~ Join Date: May 2005 Location: Massachusetts Posts: 2,155 Thanks: 3 Thanked 11 Times in 10 Posts Credits: 18,111	Re: I want to try Finally ! a happy one. ( that is compared to your other ones ) Just what i have bin waiting for from you as you well know.There were a few spelling mistakes i pointed out to you which you fix'd,besides that it was perfect in my opinion.Allot of emotion and felling when in to it.Very good ! hope to see more of this kind from you. __________________ ....Player Killer.... † " There Is Nothing To Fear But F.E.A.R It Self "- (F.E.A.R) † Last edited by koga23; Oct 26, 2007 at 02:52 PM.
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Oct 26, 2007, 12:42 PM	#4 (permalink)
dark1angel Tournaments Won: 1 Hybrid Humanoid Forever Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: In a Purified Realm Of Lightness Posts: 562 Thanks: 71 Thanked 21 Times in 21 Posts Credits: 21,010	Re: I want to try Excellent poem you got here though the parts you described here are indeed affectionate and i like these certain poems that lets you get out these sad emotion as well the interest, and the believe that there is a good feeling about it i admire this poem very much and i would like to see more of your work in the future. __________________ Traveling so far can mean anything but in the real world your life can expand to your dreams. \|アスタロス\|
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Astaroth Chtonian Slayer Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: you really do not want to know Posts: 563 Thanks: 23 Thanked 47 Times in 45 Posts Credits: 31,449	Re: I want to try OMG................that just stunned me!!!!!!!!!! Absolutely wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!! __________________ DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
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Oct 27, 2007, 03:12 PM	#6 (permalink)
Tifa Lockhart Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Nibelheim Posts: 150 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 2,687	Re: I want to try I agree with Astaroth. That is what I thought after reading your poem. Keep up the terrific work. ^^
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Oct 27, 2007, 09:16 PM	#7 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,148	Re: I want to try "But I find it so hard to tell you how I feel Make me speak the truth, express what I don't understand myself" I agree with that terribly... there are certain times we have this feelings we dont even understand... and i find it hard expressing it... A nice poem there ^^ keep it up __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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!mveli2 Banned Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: IN A CRAZY HOUSE @_@ Posts: 129 Thanks: 42 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Credits: 4,291	Re: I want to try wow that poem was so good its probably the best poem that u have done keep up the great work
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Oct 28, 2007, 12:12 AM	#9 (permalink)
blakjapaneseangl Newbie Join Date: Sep 2007 Posts: 25 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 677	Re: I want to try i like the pom. it's a good romanc poem. but to me i cant fl so in love that i can give my lif for them or do any of the oth stuff said in the poem. i love reading these type of poems but i dont have it in me to perform the poem. please keep on writing i loved it. __________________ i In the words of larry boy. "with great chocolate comes great responsibility."
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Shippo101 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In a banana Posts: 220 Thanks: 11 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 4,261	Re: I want to try that poem was so far past absolutly wonderfuli simply loved it, the first line caught my eye and the last was making wish there were more lol awesome work keep it up __________________ The heavens laugh at our foolish deed and the greed we exceed
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