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    I weak, so frail...

    Based on real events, that happened between July 3rd and July 10th
    Poem dedicated for Tanja, my love.

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    I waited that week for long time --
    I dropped everything for that week.
    For that one week I could spend with you --
    but I could never knew what would happen --
    before our week together.

    You were going through the hardest time --
    the hardest time of your life --
    and I couldn't be there for you --
    to give you strenght and power to fight.

    I felt so weak -- all I could do was just watch.
    Watch when you shed tears,
    cos' of this life --
    cos' of me --

    I tried everything I could --
    so I could get to you, but for nothing.
    No matter how much I tried it wasn't enough --
    enough to get to you.

    And when you shed tears, I had best time --
    best time of my life -- or I would have had --
    Cos' you couldn't be here, with me --
    I could just cry, nothing else --

    And just before I fall to sleep --
    I'm sending present to you -- a kiss
    a kiss for my angel --
    a kiss for my love.

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    [Post script]
    I'll come for you and fight with you all the way towards end.
    First I would like to apologize what I did...

    I'm sorry, I that I couldn't be there for you when you needed me.
    I'm sorry for pain, sorry for those hours you spend shedding tears,
    sorry for everything.
    Last edited by NightFox; Jul 19, 2006 at 08:20 AM.


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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    This poem is so sweet! And sad too..

    I liked this part-

    You were going through the hardest time --
    the hardest time of your life --
    and I couldn't be there for you --
    to give you strenght and power to fight.
    It gives the poem a sort of melancholy twist...

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    Thanks for comment, in this poem I was trying achieve as sad mood as possible...


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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    I think this part is confusing...


    And when you shed tears, I had best time --
    best time of my life -- or I would have had --
    Cos' you couldn't be here, with me --
    I could just cry, nothing else --
    It sounds like you are happy she cried? Doesn't make sense to my ignorant self.

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    It's referance to real life when I recieved information from college that I got in...
    but in the same time she was having really tough period.

    Meaning: She cried, I was happy...but lost my happiness cos' I heard what was happening
    and also she couldn't be here with me to celebrate.


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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    wow...a very emotional piece Night ^_^
    I waited that week for long time --
    I dropped everything for that week.
    For that one week I could spend with you --
    but I could never knew what would happen --
    before your week
    i didnt get that part T_T "i could never knew what would happen before your week" ????
    still, it's a good poem.
    and ur style of using " ----" is sorta kewl

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    Pain lets you know you are alive..........And it is a fine teacher....Learn what you may....
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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    taurus is actually correct for once, i enjoyed your poem very much i hope you continue to write more

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