I weak, so frail...

*NightFox* · Jul 11, 2006, 08:26 AM

Based on real events, that happened between July 3rd and July 10th
Poem dedicated for Tanja, my love.

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I waited that week for long time --
I dropped everything for that week.
For that one week I could spend with you --
but I could never knew what would happen --
before our week together.

You were going through the hardest time --
the hardest time of your life --
and I couldn't be there for you --
to give you strenght and power to fight.

I felt so weak -- all I could do was just watch.
Watch when you shed tears,
cos' of this life --
cos' of me --

I tried everything I could --
so I could get to you, but for nothing.
No matter how much I tried it wasn't enough --
enough to get to you.

And when you shed tears, I had best time --
best time of my life -- or I would have had --
Cos' you couldn't be here, with me --
I could just cry, nothing else --

And just before I fall to sleep --
I'm sending present to you -- a kiss
a kiss for my angel --
a kiss for my love.

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[Post script]
I'll come for you and fight with you all the way towards end.
First I would like to apologize what I did...

I'm sorry, I that I couldn't be there for you when you needed me.
I'm sorry for pain, sorry for those hours you spend shedding tears,
sorry for everything.

Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me · Jul 11, 2006, 08:52 AM

This poem is so sweet! And sad too..

I liked this part-

Quote:

You were going through the hardest time --
the hardest time of your life --
and I couldn't be there for you --
to give you strenght and power to fight.

It gives the poem a sort of melancholy twist...

*NightFox* · Jul 11, 2006, 08:55 AM

Thanks for comment, in this poem I was trying achieve as sad mood as possible...

pigtaru · Jul 11, 2006, 11:19 AM

I think this part is confusing...

Quote:

And when you shed tears, I had best time --
best time of my life -- or I would have had --
Cos' you couldn't be here, with me --
I could just cry, nothing else --

It sounds like you are happy she cried? Doesn't make sense to my ignorant self.

*NightFox* · Jul 11, 2006, 11:23 AM

It's referance to real life when I recieved information from college that I got in...
but in the same time she was having really tough period.

Meaning: She cried, I was happy...but lost my happiness cos' I heard what was happening
and also she couldn't be here with me to celebrate.

elie26 · Jul 13, 2006, 01:19 AM

wow...a very emotional piece Night ^_^

Quote:

I waited that week for long time --
I dropped everything for that week.
For that one week I could spend with you --
but I could never knew what would happen --
before your week

i didnt get that part T_T "i could never knew what would happen before your week" ????
still, it's a good poem.
and ur style of using " ----" is sorta kewl

TaurusDemon23 · Jul 13, 2006, 01:25 AM

Pain lets you know you are alive..........And it is a fine teacher....Learn what you may....

Heartless_mage · Jul 13, 2006, 02:07 AM

taurus is actually correct for once, i enjoyed your poem very much i hope you continue to write more

*NightFox* · Jul 13, 2006, 02:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by elie26

wow...a very emotional piece Night ^_^

i didnt get that part T_T "i could never knew what would happen before your week" ????
still, it's a good poem.
and ur style of using " ----" is sorta kewl

lol, I made stupid typo in that part, "your" should have been "our".
And seecond typo right after cos' I read what I typed...and din't think at all
Fixed it...thanks for spotting it

JefferyXie · Jul 14, 2006, 12:42 AM

Wow,this poem is so emotional that it touched my heart.THis is good quality stuff.

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Jul 16, 2006, 05:04 PM

i like how you described how you felt about
her and how you wanted to be there for her
but couldnt very real life stuff here awesome poem

Jul 11, 2006, 08:26 AM	#1 (permalink)
NightFox Mr/Miss Butterfly Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: University of Turku Posts: 500 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,277	I weak, so frail... Based on real events, that happened between July 3rd and July 10th Poem dedicated for Tanja, my love. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I waited that week for long time -- I dropped everything for that week. For that one week I could spend with you -- but I could never knew what would happen -- before our week together. You were going through the hardest time -- the hardest time of your life -- and I couldn't be there for you -- to give you strenght and power to fight. I felt so weak -- all I could do was just watch. Watch when you shed tears, cos' of this life -- cos' of me -- I tried everything I could -- so I could get to you, but for nothing. No matter how much I tried it wasn't enough -- enough to get to you. And when you shed tears, I had best time -- best time of my life -- or I would have had -- Cos' you couldn't be here, with me -- I could just cry, nothing else -- And just before I fall to sleep -- I'm sending present to you -- a kiss a kiss for my angel -- a kiss for my love. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [Post script] I'll come for you and fight with you all the way towards end. First I would like to apologize what I did... I'm sorry, I that I couldn't be there for you when you needed me. I'm sorry for pain, sorry for those hours you spend shedding tears, sorry for everything. __________________ Love hurts...trust me I know, I really do... Last edited by NightFox; Jul 19, 2006 at 08:20 AM.
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NightFox Mr/Miss Butterfly Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: University of Turku Posts: 500 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,277	Re: I weak, so frail... Thanks for comment, in this poem I was trying achieve as sad mood as possible... __________________ Love hurts...trust me I know, I really do...
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