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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    Quote Originally Posted by elie26
    wow...a very emotional piece Night ^_^

    i didnt get that part T_T "i could never knew what would happen before your week" ????
    still, it's a good poem.
    and ur style of using " ----" is sorta kewl

    lol, I made stupid typo in that part, "your" should have been "our".
    And seecond typo right after cos' I read what I typed...and din't think at all
    Fixed it...thanks for spotting it


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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    Wow,this poem is so emotional that it touched my heart.THis is good quality stuff.

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    i like how you described how you felt about
    her and how you wanted to be there for her
    but couldnt very real life stuff here awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    Hmmm... This poem was a tad confusing at first then I read your reply to pigtaru's question and it made since. Great work. I like happiness and sadness mixed into one, it works well.

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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    How fell you understand that very part of poem depends how you think about it.
    For first...yes it's confusing, but with small comment it can be cleared.
    I allways try to make something into my poems where people can choose,
    how they "read" that part of poem.

    Thanks for comments.


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    Re: I weak, so frail...

    I'm sorry, I that I couldn't be there for you when you needed me.
    I'm sorry for pain, sorry for those hours you spend shedding tears,
    sorry for everything.

    - This could go into so many things, I know what it's like to be sorry for not being there for someone or have someone not be there for you.
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