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    I will always love you

    Now you're gone....now we have ended
    Feeling like it was all just a dream,
    Was it the right choice? Or.... was it a mistake?
    Moving on isn't so bad but it's sad I had to lose you....

    How I wish you was here now
    Always thinking about my lost love
    Just so close then it all is gone,
    Never thought it would end in heart break

    I just couldn't handle another fight
    The one you love isn't easy to walk away from
    I only wish you were here so I could hold you tight
    Is it so obvious? That I still love you

    My heart always beats for you
    Laying here wondering is those feelings are still there,
    Knowing we have moved on but wish we could be together
    I need you here but you're always so far away

    It's obvious that I still have feelings for you
    Losing my mind so broken inside
    My heart stops when you look at me
    Just wish I could hold you in my arms

    I believe that out love was real and true
    Your touch always makes me feel at ease,
    I need you here with me I can't go on this way
    P.S I still and will always love you



    I want to know what everyone thinks, I love this poem. Just tell me whatcha think....thank you
    Last edited by Neha1994; Sep 29, 2011 at 09:07 AM.
    I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    Re: I will always love you

    Moose likes but whats with all the question marks?

    Death is as generation is, a composition of like elements, and a decompostion into the same.

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    Re: I will always love you

    I really like it - although the question marks did make it a little hard to understand. I love the way that you can feel the feeling that you were trying to put into the poem. Its a really good poem, i only wish i could write like you do.
    On the other hand though, i feel that the structure of the poem needed something. Maybe if you were to change a couple of words in the second and third paragraphs so that the rythym of the poem would be easier to handle. I still think its an awesome poem though.

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    Re: I will always love you

    yeah the question marks appeared out of no where..... and thats probably becuase i wrote this and saved it into my email then i copied and pasted it here. But thank you.
    I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    there it is fixed....hope you enjoy..........stupid 50 character minimum.
    I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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