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Now you're gone....now we have ended
Feeling like it was all just a dream,
Was it the right choice? Or.... was it a mistake?
Moving on isn't so bad but it's sad I had to lose you....
How I wish you was here now
Always thinking about my lost love
Just so close then it all is gone,
Never thought it would end in heart break
I just couldn't handle another fight
The one you love isn't easy to walk away from
I only wish you were here so I could hold you tight
Is it so obvious? That I still love you
My heart always beats for you
Laying here wondering is those feelings are still there,
Knowing we have moved on but wish we could be together
I need you here but you're always so far away
It's obvious that I still have feelings for you
Losing my mind so broken inside
My heart stops when you look at me
Just wish I could hold you in my arms
I believe that out love was real and true
Your touch always makes me feel at ease,
I need you here with me I can't go on this way
P.S I still and will always love you
I want to know what everyone thinks, I love this poem. Just tell me whatcha think....thank you
Last edited by Neha1994; Sep 29, 2011 at 09:07 AM.
I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Death is as generation is, a composition of like elements, and a decompostion into the same.
Neha1994 (Sep 29, 2011)
I really like it - although the question marks did make it a little hard to understand. I love the way that you can feel the feeling that you were trying to put into the poem. Its a really good poem, i only wish i could write like you do.
On the other hand though, i feel that the structure of the poem needed something. Maybe if you were to change a couple of words in the second and third paragraphs so that the rythym of the poem would be easier to handle. I still think its an awesome poem though.
yeah the question marks appeared out of no where..... and thats probably becuase i wrote this and saved it into my email then i copied and pasted it here. But thank you.
I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
there it is fixed....hope you enjoy..........stupid 50 character minimum.
I found him and I love him with all my heart!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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