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    (I wish I had a title for this >.<)

    Your body pushes against mine
    Your hands wrap around me like a tie
    Your lips continue to shine
    As your heart never dies

    You are more precious to the sun itself
    As I may say you are that shining king
    You are the beauty to everything
    Precious as a rose, precious like yourself

    Handsome is always you
    Kindness is part of you too
    A heart such pure as your
    Just makes my heart soar

    Voice so sweet from anywhere
    Is truly your my sweet
    Personality is what keeps me aware
    But thats how we were able to meet

    Your eyes show so much emotion
    That nothing can't cause our separation
    Your touch continues to defeat me
    Since it amazes me as you see

    Never doubt our love to any
    Cause our love is better than many
    Since who wouldn't desire you??
    As I continue you are too fair too

    Time may be faster than us my dove
    Even the heavens maybe above
    But love you are and shall be
    No matter what cause it'll be from me

    Rain, thunder, any weather can't stop love
    Therefore your never gone, your never alone
    Heart like your is never a hard as stone
    As kindness as well take you to only above

    So goodbye will never be taken or send
    Since in our love it will last till the end



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    My sister said this was the best poem I had ever made.

    -.- "I don't believe that cause I'm no good poetic."

    But oh well! ^^ Enjoy

    PS. This is for someone I love dearly. And he's very precious to me and dear. ^^ I hope that he'll be able to read this since I do love him. ^^

    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: (I wish I had a title for this >.<)

    Well this is pretty sweet...
    I have not had the fortune of reading your other works.
    but I think that this is very good.

    Rain, thunder, any weather can't stop love
    Therefore your never gone, your never alone
    Heart like your is never a hard as stone
    As kindness as well take you to only above

    this has to be my favorite stanza of the poem...
    and I must just say well done.

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    Re: (I wish I had a title for this >.<)

    I love this poem. Its very sweet and romantic. Some rhyming was off. But i loved the words you used on there. You are good at poems. At least better than me. Very good structure after a long time of writing, it paid off. i know who its for^^....i hope he reads it too^^.

    Good work^^
    Yeah, Bye.

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