I would give you my heart
And the love that comes with it
I would never lose you again
I would never forget
I would give you a house
That could keep you safe
And beautiful to match it
Just like your shining face
I would give you a car
That would drive you away
From of your troubles
On any given day
I would give you the the country
The whole entire earth
Yet nothing would match
To how much you are worth
I would give you anything
Even from now or has been
To have you right here
In my arms, once again.
Writer's notes: Man, I feel so...Sensitive, a bit too sensitive. But I have to finish up my poem story so I guess I have to stick with the feeling. Anyways, I felt like making up a different poem before I start again on my four part story (I just figured, I think it might be more than four parts =/). Tell me what you think and thanks for reading.
Last edited by Chaos105; Jul 28, 2007 at 07:59 AM.
They say, "I will die for my country." I never hear them say, "I will kill for my country."
I love it!!! it's a wonderful love poem, but it's not banal at all- it's sweet yet very real- it's clear that the feelings of the lyrical "me" are real...
A really nice work!!!! I'll be waiting forward for the next one and for the four part poem-story!!!
Wowser... whoever she is, shes a lucky woman.
Tell me, where are the other men like you hiding?
Wait... I know... They're with other women.
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. I'm working on part three right now but it's kinda hard for me. While I was writing it, it might actually be more than four parts.Originally Posted by Lasura
Heh, thanks. But it seems I'm the only one like this in my area I'm around.
They say, "I will die for my country." I never hear them say, "I will kill for my country."
omg!!great work here aww so romantic ur girl is going 2 be lucky to have such a great poet great job love the emotions keep it ↑
♥~*The Princess*~♥
Yeah, Bye.
awesome man that was good really good and dont be afraid to be sensitive sometimes
Thanks everybody. I'm glad you liked it. I guess I'm more of a sensitive person then I thought I was.
They say, "I will die for my country." I never hear them say, "I will kill for my country."
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