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RayMe (Mar 17, 2009)
I am sorry first and foremost
to all the other poets who's work goes without my feedback.
I only want to take my seat back.
As I am too overwhelmed and chaotic.
Seemingly neurotic,
and distracted by erotic...
...thoughts too much.
Thighs I touch.
I think about myself.
And him, I follow on the internet.
Though I only walk on digital lines I wish to tread...
... within my head.
And In your existence...
I may be just a whisper at a distance.
For an instance, if anything.
A user name upon your screen.
Annoying lover. Lucid dream.
Or exactly what... I... seem.
I can feel it trickle. Feel it tingle.
They ask me If I'm single.
I am, and still I'm bound.
Able to adhere so sound.
to a love I haven't found.
And yet its in this love I drowned.
So, sorry for no feedback on the poetry.
I'm busy sinking in a sea.
Of loving you and touching me.
... Not Ever Again...
RayMe (Mar 17, 2009)
Wow! Umm... Wow! LOL.
The rhyme scheme works, yet, I wonder: Why the apology for the lack of poetry comments? I have a habit of not commenting when I receive comments, and I'm trying to get in the habit of returning the favor, myself.
Anywho, now that I've strayed from the point; good work!
Well, The poem was intended to be thoughts that crossed my mind as I wrote the poem. And going into writing a poem on this forum. I am almost always feeling like a jerk for not commenting on the poems written before mine that caught my eye.
... Not Ever Again...
Able to adhere so sound.
to a love I haven't found.
And yet its in this love I drownedLove this one here...
This poem got a weak start... but then it goes stronger... and i love the rhyme schemes.. it was very nice ^^ I could never do good rhyming poems.. >.< it's too.. how to say.. umm.. forced.. yes thats the word
Umm.. you don't need to apologize for that.. i understand it alright.. because im in the same situation as youplus... i have no net at home >.<
Good job peachyloved it ^^ Kudos to you
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I agree with RayMe
Its a little weak starting off, but gets more poerful as it goes along.
I really like it.
Great job!
"You think you know me...? You have no idea."
I agree with RayMe as well; it did start of a little weaker that in should, but it did become more powerful as it went along. I have to admit, you may just be a better writer than I... But, it won't matter in the long run, now will it?
Sweet I love this poem! I lauged.. I cried... I saved five bucks!! (that was my favorite part)Anyway back to the poem, I was also one of those people who liked how you were able the make the rhythm and rhyming just flow together.
atomik_sprout took the LOL right out of my mouth. I don't really write poetry anymore, so I don't know if I'd be any good at it (my poetry teacher made me continue writing poems over and over again saying she should make them into a book, but it ended up just making my hand sore and making me hate writing poetry.)
More on topic, this poem made me laugh extremely hard. I needed that. It's still a very nice poem though, and too true to most people who spend alot of time on the internet.
Good job.
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