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    If i died tonight (A cutters final thoughts, and no,this not a true story)

    If I died tonight,
    Would anyone care?
    Because as far as I can see,
    No ones even aware,

    Sure they know I'm a cutter.
    And once, they did care,
    They even stopped me from committing suicide,
    But I know those thoughts just aren't there.

    My dad called me a psycho,
    My sister calls me a freak,
    My friends dont show the same interest they once did,
    And inside I'm so incredibly weak.

    I'm not going to lie to you,
    They talk and ask, "Whats New?"
    But can they just not see,
    That soon my life might be through?

    If I died tonight,
    How long would it take to forget my name?
    School, friends, family, and fun,
    I'll just be another picture on the wall of shame.

    If I died tonight,
    Or maybe that "if" should be a "will,"
    As I lay on the bathroom floor,
    Blood from my wrists will continue to spill.

    Would my dad still think I'm a psycho?
    Will my sister still call me a freak?
    Will my friends completely lose interest?
    Or would they stay up, unable to sleep?

    Will I commit suicide,
    If things keep getting worse?
    How long will I be able to stand,
    On lifes cruel course?

    I keep sinking into the dark,
    Alone more and more,
    Still I do cut,
    I cant even answer "what for?"

    I've become so very interested,
    I keep staring at my wrists,
    My mind keeps calling,
    For that razorblades kiss.

    How long can I keep this urge,
    Down at bay?
    A time will come when I will give in,
    And suicide will come my way.

    If I died tonight,
    Would you even care?
    Because as far as I can see,
    You not even aware..

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    Re: If i died tonight (A cutters final thoughts, and no,this not a true story)

    Personally I like the rhyme scheme in this poem. And its not at the sacrifice of keeping pattern of emotion and feelings on track.

    This poem is really impressive flaminghate! Keep up the great work, I look forward to your future works. ^_^

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    Re: If i died tonight (A cutters final thoughts, and no,this not a true story)

    thanks Ashe,
    I spent many hours working on my poems.

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    Re: If i died tonight (A cutters final thoughts, and no,this not a true story)

    I wouldve adored a bit of descriptive words, make some things 'pop' and come to life.
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