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    If love is...

    if love is suicide
    then let me die once again
    bury me so deep
    for me not to love again

    if love is more than death
    then just erase me
    so that I won't find you
    for you to be free

    if love is destiny
    then never let me be destined
    just let me live alone
    so that I won't be envied

    if love means nothing
    then why do I feel the pain
    it's burning up inside me
    so just let me feel the rain

    if love is endless
    then i hope this is my end
    because I can't take it anymore
    so please let it be my very end


    "Never tell a man that you love him until he has declared his undying love for you."

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    Re: If love is...

    A very interesting poem... nicely done there... kinda sad though...

    It seems this poem is about someone who been through a bad relationship..and now afraid to start a new or should i say fall in love again...

    Depressing poem indeed... ^^ nicely done i say.. the poem is filled with such emotion...
    it's a sucess i'd say.. nicely done ^^ keep up the good work

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    Re: If love is...

    Yes love does seem like a form of sucide, kindl of like giving your life away. but then you are starting a new one, great job! Keep up the good work and hope to see more from you~
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: If love is...

    Wow Pink Hanna I have to say you give another view on love. Quite interesting, although I have to say your right, even though you find the right one it is still a pain if it is in distance, you long to be with them yet you cant, you cant help worrying about them even though it may not be necessary. Anyways (me rambling sorry) great job, I like it. Sad but I still liked it alot keep up the good work.
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    Re: If love is...

    Hmm... Interesting.

    I like this one. Yet, it seems so sad because when reading this, it's almost like this poem is saying that love essentially ruined someone's life. Very emotional and well written though. Good job. ^_^


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    Wow,

    Simply beautiful and is so true. The feeling that nearly everyone questions among themselves.

    Keep up the great work!

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    Re: If love is...

    Hmmm... this confuses me a little bit. Because in most of the poem, you talk about love being... bad? Of the fact that you're done with it, that you're tired and hurt and want to get away (sorry... I just know how that feels), but in the first stranza... it is different. In that one it seems that you really love to be in love.

    Like- "if love is suicide" you are reay to die and if you die ofcourse you must be burried. And death means the end- so "let me not to love again", witch doesn't mean that you don't like this love... It only means that you don't want to love again, don't want to love anyone else... Ok, maybe it's just my bad English. But this is how I see this stranza and I really, really love this one and I think I must write it in my note book or something (with your name by it ofcourse )- a really nice mood in it and everyting- lovin it! ^^

    Anyways- a very nice work ^^ And I hope to see more ^^

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    Re: If love is...

    I can really identify with this piece of work. In fact I'm supprised i didn't write it. Well almost anyways. I really think the flow is great and the wording is okay too. I vote for capitalization and punctuation though. Writing looks more polished and such then. But I hope to see more from ya'.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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