pink_hana

if love is suicide
then let me die once again
bury me so deep
for me not to love again

if love is more than death
then just erase me
so that I won't find you
for you to be free

if love is destiny
then never let me be destined
just let me live alone
so that I won't be envied

if love means nothing
then why do I feel the pain
it's burning up inside me
so just let me feel the rain

if love is endless
then i hope this is my end
because I can't take it anymore
so please let it be my very end

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RayMe

A very interesting poem... nicely done there... kinda sad though...

It seems this poem is about someone who been through a bad relationship..and now afraid to start a new or should i say fall in love again...

Depressing poem indeed... ^^ nicely done i say.. the poem is filled with such emotion...
it's a sucess i'd say.. nicely done ^^ keep up the good work

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highteckdudu

Yes love does seem like a form of sucide, kindl of like giving your life away. but then you are starting a new one, great job! Keep up the good work and hope to see more from you~

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Ichigo_06

Wow Pink Hanna I have to say you give another view on love. Quite interesting, although I have to say your right, even though you find the right one it is still a pain if it is in distance, you long to be with them yet you cant, you cant help worrying about them even though it may not be necessary. Anyways (me rambling sorry) great job, I like it. Sad but I still liked it alot keep up the good work.

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atomik_sprout

Hmm... Interesting.

I like this one. Yet, it seems so sad because when reading this, it's almost like this poem is saying that love essentially ruined someone's life. Very emotional and well written though. Good job. ^_^

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ihauntforlust

Wow,

Simply beautiful and is so true. The feeling that nearly everyone questions among themselves.

Keep up the great work!

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Lasura

Hmmm... this confuses me a little bit. Because in most of the poem, you talk about love being... bad? Of the fact that you're done with it, that you're tired and hurt and want to get away (sorry... I just know how that feels), but in the first stranza... it is different. In that one it seems that you really love to be in love.

Like- "if love is suicide" you are reay to die and if you die ofcourse you must be burried. And death means the end- so "let me not to love again", witch doesn't mean that you don't like this love... It only means that you don't want to love again, don't want to love anyone else... Ok, maybe it's just my bad English. But this is how I see this stranza and I really, really love this one and I think I must write it in my note book or something (with your name by it ofcourse )- a really nice mood in it and everyting- lovin it! ^^

Anyways- a very nice work ^^ And I hope to see more ^^

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bratling

I can really identify with this piece of work. In fact I'm supprised i didn't write it. Well almost anyways. I really think the flow is great and the wording is okay too. I vote for capitalization and punctuation though. Writing looks more polished and such then. But I hope to see more from ya'.

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