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    If Only If Only

    If Only If Only

    Looks like I’m completely fine on the outside
    It’s too bad I can’t say the same for the inside
    Complete chaos, terrible dreams
    Feels like I’m gonna tear at the seams
    Sick and tired of all this bad stuff
    Its getting harder and harder to stay tough
    Things aren’t really going my way anymore
    I wish things were just as they were before
    So many opportunities I had
    Not taking them makes me sad
    Sitting still in my lonely bed
    Trying to get it out of my head
    Setting aside all my sorrow
    Trying to think about tomorrow
    Feels so much like I’m outta place
    In this dark and dreary empty space
    My heart feels like its slowly sinking
    My mind is on the edge of breaking
    So many tries for me to do things right
    But now you want me out of your sight
    And of my two loves
    Now one friend one foe
    Waiting here so lonely so lonely
    Thinking in my head if only if only

    ...oh high school

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    Re: If Only If Only

    I love this poem!!!!!! I kinda feel like that in a way and it's just so deep!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this poem so much indeed!!!! So I hope to see more!!!!!
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    Re: If Only If Only

    this was beautiful. I think one of the most important things ever... is not to regret. But remember. Remember your mistakes, and own them.... and eventually everything will be ok. (as long as you dont make the same mistakes). So forget about "if only" you had done this and that. And think about "what if"....
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: If Only If Only

    i love this poem. i can actually relate to it.
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    Re: If Only If Only

    Yes, this was a very nice poem, using the title of another poem.

    You got it from Holes By Louis Sachar, am I correct?

    Anyway, good adaptation, and I hope to see more


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: If Only If Only

    A nice poem indeed... I didn't like something in it, something made it a little bit off, but I dunno what exactly, maybe it just reminded me of Linking Park too much and LP reminds me of my ex and he makes me thing of "if only" too ^^ lol

    But it's really cool- you've done a good work with rythming and with explaining your feelngs, it was interesting to read it and I'll be waiting forward for more ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: If Only If Only

    Quote Originally Posted by ILikeApples5520 View Post
    Yes, this was a very nice poem, using the title of another poem.

    You got it from Holes By Louis Sachar, am I correct?

    Anyway, good adaptation, and I hope to see more
    I didn't actually, that was just an original piece of work with no relation to any poems or songs. words just seemed to spill onto the page for that one, i was pretty fustrated with the futility of high school relationships.

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    Re: If Only If Only

    Oh sry, I just remember a song from that book called "If Only If Only."

    My bad. lol


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