If Only If Only

kamikazekrn · Jul 24, 2007, 04:44 PM

If Only If Only

Looks like I’m completely fine on the outside
It’s too bad I can’t say the same for the inside
Complete chaos, terrible dreams
Feels like I’m gonna tear at the seams
Sick and tired of all this bad stuff
Its getting harder and harder to stay tough
Things aren’t really going my way anymore
I wish things were just as they were before
So many opportunities I had
Not taking them makes me sad
Sitting still in my lonely bed
Trying to get it out of my head
Setting aside all my sorrow
Trying to think about tomorrow
Feels so much like I’m outta place
In this dark and dreary empty space
My heart feels like its slowly sinking
My mind is on the edge of breaking
So many tries for me to do things right
But now you want me out of your sight
And of my two loves
Now one friend one foe
Waiting here so lonely so lonely
Thinking in my head if only if only

...oh high school

KuwiRules145 · Jul 24, 2007, 07:07 PM

I love this poem!!!!!! I kinda feel like that in a way and it's just so deep!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this poem so much indeed!!!! So I hope to see more!!!!!

*Peach_follows* · Jul 24, 2007, 07:16 PM

this was beautiful. I think one of the most important things ever... is not to regret. But remember. Remember your mistakes, and own them.... and eventually everything will be ok. (as long as you dont make the same mistakes). So forget about "if only" you had done this and that. And think about "what if"....

BAUTIFULSOUL · Jul 24, 2007, 07:23 PM

i love this poem. i can actually relate to it.
GOOD JOB!!

ILikeApples5520 · Jul 24, 2007, 07:58 PM

Yes, this was a very nice poem, using the title of another poem.

You got it from Holes By Louis Sachar, am I correct?

Anyway, good adaptation, and I hope to see more

*Lasura* · Jul 25, 2007, 03:33 AM

A nice poem indeed... I didn't like something in it, something made it a little bit off, but I dunno what exactly, maybe it just reminded me of Linking Park too much and LP reminds me of my ex and he makes me thing of "if only" too ^^ lol

But it's really cool- you've done a good work with rythming and with explaining your feelngs, it was interesting to read it and I'll be waiting forward for more ^^

kamikazekrn · Jul 27, 2007, 04:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ILikeApples5520

Yes, this was a very nice poem, using the title of another poem.

You got it from Holes By Louis Sachar, am I correct?

Anyway, good adaptation, and I hope to see more

I didn't actually, that was just an original piece of work with no relation to any poems or songs. words just seemed to spill onto the page for that one, i was pretty fustrated with the futility of high school relationships.

ILikeApples5520 · Jul 27, 2007, 06:13 PM

Oh sry, I just remember a song from that book called "If Only If Only."

My bad. lol

Jul 24, 2007, 04:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
kamikazekrn Newbie Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: SoCali Posts: 46 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 219	If Only If Only If Only If Only Looks like I’m completely fine on the outside It’s too bad I can’t say the same for the inside Complete chaos, terrible dreams Feels like I’m gonna tear at the seams Sick and tired of all this bad stuff Its getting harder and harder to stay tough Things aren’t really going my way anymore I wish things were just as they were before So many opportunities I had Not taking them makes me sad Sitting still in my lonely bed Trying to get it out of my head Setting aside all my sorrow Trying to think about tomorrow Feels so much like I’m outta place In this dark and dreary empty space My heart feels like its slowly sinking My mind is on the edge of breaking So many tries for me to do things right But now you want me out of your sight And of my two loves Now one friend one foe Waiting here so lonely so lonely Thinking in my head if only if only ...oh high school
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KuwiRules145 Tournaments Won: 2 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 963 Thanks: 3 Thanked 24 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,226	Re: If Only If Only I love this poem!!!!!! I kinda feel like that in a way and it's just so deep!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this poem so much indeed!!!! So I hope to see more!!!!! __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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Peach_follows Moving right along.... Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 1,165 Thanks: 62 Thanked 64 Times in 56 Posts Credits: 3,534	Re: If Only If Only this was beautiful. I think one of the most important things ever... is not to regret. But remember. Remember your mistakes, and own them.... and eventually everything will be ok. (as long as you dont make the same mistakes). So forget about "if only" you had done this and that. And think about "what if".... __________________ If you don't like my peaches. Don't shake my tree. http://www.myspace.com/j1gg481tt
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BAUTIFULSOUL Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: ontario, canada Posts: 125 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 2,187	Re: If Only If Only i love this poem. i can actually relate to it. GOOD JOB!! __________________ IF YOU LISTEN CLOSELY, YOU CAN HEAR MY HEART BEATING FOR YOU. THIS BEAUTIFUL SIG MADE BY LASURA=D
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ILikeApples5520 Otaku Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Bergen County, NJ Posts: 298 Thanks: 8 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 6,433	Re: If Only If Only Yes, this was a very nice poem, using the title of another poem. You got it from Holes By Louis Sachar, am I correct? Anyway, good adaptation, and I hope to see more __________________ Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!
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Jul 25, 2007, 03:33 AM	#6 (permalink)
Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,872 Thanks: 56 Thanked 34 Times in 31 Posts Credits: 49,619	Re: If Only If Only A nice poem indeed... I didn't like something in it, something made it a little bit off, but I dunno what exactly, maybe it just reminded me of Linking Park too much and LP reminds me of my ex and he makes me thing of "if only" too ^^ lol But it's really cool- you've done a good work with rythming and with explaining your feelngs, it was interesting to read it and I'll be waiting forward for more ^^ __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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ILikeApples5520 Otaku Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Bergen County, NJ Posts: 298 Thanks: 8 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 6,433	Re: If Only If Only Oh sry, I just remember a song from that book called "If Only If Only." My bad. lol __________________ Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!
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