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Reply With QuoteI liked this one to you cn write poem good hope to c more
As I walk into the shadows
Of my own death
I walk into it,
But they won't take my breath
I'll walk in the snow
Into the ice cold
I'll remain strong
I'll never grew so old
I walk into the fire
Never feel the passion burning
Don't ever call me a lair
My spirit is never turning
I'll walk in the rain
In a storm's of thunder
Sparks of lightning
Puts me in a whole lot of pressure.
I liked this one to you cn write poem good hope to c more
Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday
thats really good!u should try to get ur stuff published cuz id buy that stuff
Thanks Fredsboo and Lev, I like the elements in this poem though it gave a great effort in it.
Neh, some of the rhymes didn't fit very well. Was the thing you were trying to articulate death? Or just struggle?
It's got good ground and some okay wordings, but it needs work.
the love you withhold is the pain you carry.
Your POEMS RULE! I really do like poems. Looking for more in the future ok.Stay happy Everyone and smile for everyone.
Staying a live makes me happy
Living causes nothing but pain
You happiness my come from anything like taffy
Just please don't blame
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
I could feel every word that is written in the story.Mainly it was the imagery that achieved this.The repition of the "I'll" in my opinion makes the reader either feel as if they were the person in the poem or could empathise with the poem.I like it.
I thought it was pretty good. Not the best I've read but still good. It started good but I thought the last sentence didn't really fit in with the rest.
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