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    I'm not Amused (poem)

    by your crazy laughter,
    your constant whining.
    you're driving me off the edge.
    leave me be, go away.
    i don't you here, but i have to stay.
    i am not amused by your constant bitching,
    your not funny jokes.
    why do you even try...?
    you're pathetic...go away.
    i need some quiet, you're disrupting
    my thoughts, that i hear inside me.
    why bother, though?
    you've already crossed the line,
    that i drew...i may as well just...
    die, either that or kill you.
    but this is pointless, impossible.
    so...what now you ask?
    i might be able to tell you what.
    would you cry?
    i'd like to see that...
    but the worst, gut-wrenching, crazed up irony...
    the truth is...
    i can't kill you.
    you're my best friend.

    -Tyler Mitchell a.k.a Dark Angel Swordsman
    A/N: it's just one of those poems i just thought up. i think it's pretty good...what about YOU? Read and Review please.
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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    *sigh* thats pretty good *hum* straight from the heart
    Everyone has a dark side ..... including ME

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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    WoW, that is soooooooooooo long...haha, I didn't like the ending much

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    Ah...hmmmmm. Well... I get the emotion/meaning ur trying to convey. Coz its how I feel on most days, lol. However I don't think you conveyed it very well.. I agree with Pigtaru the ending wasn't a jawdropper or nothing, but then again it could have been based on ur life (hopefully not, lol).
    Overall I think its good but not great. Keep up the good work anyway.
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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    that was a tad enraged but I like it for that very reason


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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    I like it keep it up ^_^ ...........

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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    lol, i can relate to this poem on so many levels lol.

    but still i think this a great poem. i like how u ended it, its short yes, but thats y i like it. other than that i like how ur expressed it all, and with the short ending bit, just seem to seal it well.
    anyway keep up good work.

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    Re: I'm not Amused (poem)

    a very entergetic poem>
    i don't you here, but i have to stay.

    i dont understand this line though.. i dont u here .. i think u got a little to trigger happy and meant i dont want you here, but i have to stay.


    My favorite part of this poem is at the end when the entire mood changes from anger to a snese of realization that the person is still your friend. Well done ^_^
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