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Reply With Quote*sigh* thats pretty good *hum* straight from the heart
by your crazy laughter,
your constant whining.
you're driving me off the edge.
leave me be, go away.
i don't you here, but i have to stay.
i am not amused by your constant bitching,
your not funny jokes.
why do you even try...?
you're pathetic...go away.
i need some quiet, you're disrupting
my thoughts, that i hear inside me.
why bother, though?
you've already crossed the line,
that i drew...i may as well just...
die, either that or kill you.
but this is pointless, impossible.
so...what now you ask?
i might be able to tell you what.
would you cry?
i'd like to see that...
but the worst, gut-wrenching, crazed up irony...
the truth is...
i can't kill you.
you're my best friend.
-Tyler Mitchell a.k.a Dark Angel Swordsman
A/N: it's just one of those poems i just thought up. i think it's pretty good...what about YOU? Read and Review please.
Last edited by dark angel swordsman; Apr 27, 2006 at 03:39 PM.
I won't let this world exist without me! If I die, we all die! / Avatar & Signature by anime_8000.
*sigh* thats pretty good *hum* straight from the heart
Everyone has a dark side ..... including ME
WoW, that is soooooooooooo long...haha, I didn't like the ending much
o~Piggy-san~o
Ah...hmmmmm. Well... I get the emotion/meaning ur trying to convey. Coz its how I feel on most days, lol. However I don't think you conveyed it very well.. I agree with Pigtaru the ending wasn't a jawdropper or nothing, but then again it could have been based on ur life (hopefully not, lol).
Overall I think its good but not great. Keep up the good work anyway.
Sig courtesy goes to : Sazuka. [Sig team]
that was a tad enraged but I like it for that very reason
I like it keep it up ^_^ ...........
lol, i can relate to this poem on so many levels lol.
but still i think this a great poem. i like how u ended it, its short yes, but thats y i like it. other than that i like how ur expressed it all, and with the short ending bit, just seem to seal it well.
anyway keep up good work.
a very entergetic poem>
i don't you here, but i have to stay.
i dont understand this line though.. i dont u here .. i think u got a little to trigger happy and meant i dont want you here, but i have to stay.
My favorite part of this poem is at the end when the entire mood changes from anger to a snese of realization that the person is still your friend. Well done ^_^
-Just another green eyed angel, distorted by mans love for hate-|THE INFAMOUS CHEETOS OVERLORD||IceNineKills|
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