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Reply With Quoteawesomeparty12 (Mar 31, 2009)
This Boy
She Cries Alone At Night
For A Man That Might
Just See Her For Her
And Not Just Another Blur
In This World Of Woe
Lonelyness Was Our Only Foe
She Never Really Gave A ****
About All The Punches To The Gut
She Recived After Another Heartach
There's No More Room For Another Heart Break
A boy Came One Day And Opened Her Eyes
He Wiped Her Tears And Silenced Her Cries
Till One Day They Were Forced Apart
She Knew They Would Be Able To Start
All Over Again One Day Soon
He Would Wait Paitciently Outside Her Room
Listening To Her Dreams Of Fears
Everything Went Wrong For Her And Brought Tears
She Hopes One Day They Will Be Happy
Again Together Always Making Things Clear And Snappy
But Now I Feel As If My Heart Were In Two
Because He Says Its About Time I Moved On Too
awesomeparty12 (Mar 31, 2009)
wonderful i like it maybe you should check out some of the shorts i have made
i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility
aaura (Jun 08, 2009)
well thank you ill post more when i have time
or when im on
Well I can say that the first part of your poem is sort of lonely event and for the last part of your poem is quite a relieve after a age of lonelines and finally having to move on.
Only I wonder why this a asterisk?
I know that's a g words but can you give me the word?(pm it to me) XDShe Never Really Gave A ****
I like this poem and very good for rhyming and the story on it^^
Very GOOD! and more power^^
I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
I loved my GF...
It has a very nice rhytem to it, though it is very curious of what word you used to rhyme with Gut, well anyways you are a very much poetic person than I am.
C'mon people... think about it ... "she never really gave a ___" what other profane word with a "U" sound is going to fit there?! Im sure mods just eat it up when there is attention drawn to profanity.
As for the poem... I dug it.... I love poems like this, that tell a little story. I wish the subject header were the actual Title, That would be hilarious!
This here:seemed real forced and wordy.Again Together Always Making Things Clear And Snappy
That's the only fault I find with it. Other than minor grammar errors. And the capitolization of every word (kinda strange)
... Not Ever Again...
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