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    Im a poetic person what can i say

    This Boy


    She Cries Alone At Night
    For A Man That Might
    Just See Her For Her
    And Not Just Another Blur
    In This World Of Woe
    Lonelyness Was Our Only Foe
    She Never Really Gave A ****
    About All The Punches To The Gut
    She Recived After Another Heartach
    There's No More Room For Another Heart Break
    A boy Came One Day And Opened Her Eyes
    He Wiped Her Tears And Silenced Her Cries
    Till One Day They Were Forced Apart
    She Knew They Would Be Able To Start
    All Over Again One Day Soon
    He Would Wait Paitciently Outside Her Room
    Listening To Her Dreams Of Fears
    Everything Went Wrong For Her And Brought Tears
    She Hopes One Day They Will Be Happy
    Again Together Always Making Things Clear And Snappy
    But Now I Feel As If My Heart Were In Two
    Because He Says Its About Time I Moved On Too

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    Re: Im a poetic person what can i say

    wonderful i like it maybe you should check out some of the shorts i have made
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Re: Im a poetic person what can i say

    well thank you ill post more when i have time
    or when im on

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    Re: Im a poetic person what can i say

    Well I can say that the first part of your poem is sort of lonely event and for the last part of your poem is quite a relieve after a age of lonelines and finally having to move on.
    Only I wonder why this a asterisk?
    She Never Really Gave A ****
    I know that's a g words but can you give me the word?(pm it to me) XD
    I like this poem and very good for rhyming and the story on it^^
    Very GOOD! and more power^^ XD ASAP!
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
    http://i52.tinypic.com/zxa8pj.jpg[/IMG

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    Re: Im a poetic person what can i say

    It has a very nice rhytem to it, though it is very curious of what word you used to rhyme with Gut, well anyways you are a very much poetic person than I am.

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    Re: Im a poetic person what can i say

    C'mon people... think about it ... "she never really gave a ___" what other profane word with a "U" sound is going to fit there?! Im sure mods just eat it up when there is attention drawn to profanity.

    As for the poem... I dug it.... I love poems like this, that tell a little story. I wish the subject header were the actual Title, That would be hilarious!
    This here:
    Again Together Always Making Things Clear And Snappy
    seemed real forced and wordy.
    That's the only fault I find with it. Other than minor grammar errors. And the capitolization of every word (kinda strange)
    ... Not Ever Again...

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