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    I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    If I loose you now
    I know I’ll never be the same
    Because I can not help
    The way I feel about you

    You’ve asked for my hand
    Got down on one knee
    And asked that one question
    “Will you marry me?”

    You will never know
    How much that means to me
    And now I know your gone
    And all I can do is wish

    I wish on the shooting star
    That for once in my life
    My happiness is here
    To stay

    For I never lied about that
    You are the only thing
    That has ever
    Brought me true happiness

    We talk now more than ever
    And we have only gotten closer
    I think that I have finally found
    My one true love

    Yet I have lost you
    I know that I have
    For with this poem
    You are walking out the door

    So let me say this
    Before you leave
    I will always love you
    And my heart will only ever beat


    For you…..


    -Cries hard while walking away, knowing it’s the end-

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    like i said in the last poem you wrote i can connecet to this in some way....but all 3 parts are good...i love this alot and hope to see more
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    nice poem. the rhyme style was simple, which fit perfectly with this type of poem. i got a timid and shy feeling of regret from the person about to leave his loved one, which make the poem all the more enjoyable. love poems have been done, but i rele think that this was a cut abouve. even thou i cant relate to it, its nice to read. keep up the rhyming AD201092

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    ahh yes.. agree with rainmann there.. ^^

    nicely done again... i like this 1 too..though it is kinda sad.. well... keep it up

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it you guys.. ^-^

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    A well written poem. Sad but lovely. I actually enjoy reading it. Keep up the terrific work. [:

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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    Nice. But it was really sad. My only sudgestion, Is that since it was divided into three.... that each could have had its own beggining and an ending that tied it into the next. Insted of it seeming like one continuous poem.
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    Re: I'm so sorry my love (the end)

    Oh... i never thought of that.... thanks Peach ^-^ I'll have to try that next time.

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