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    Inner me

    I know the inner me exists
    I feel the pounding heart beat
    A pained loss of love that I miss
    pain welling up for eyes to leak
    I feel the soul's desire
    The heat of hate
    A feeling burning like fire
    feelings that are faint
    I know they're there
    Waiting to emerge
    In beats a heart with ware
    I know I have the inner urge
    The need to know the inner me

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    Re: Inner me

    Good poem. I like the part that says "A feeling burning like fire" You wrote this well. Good work.

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    Re: Inner me

    hmm, not so bad.. nice poem.
    improve your skills ok..
    i hope to read more from you..
    see yah!

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    Re: Inner me

    I liked this poem quite well, enjoyed reading it, I could find my feelings in it witch is really good in a poem! Good work!!!

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    Re: Inner me

    nice use of language showing that the real u wants to burst out and tell the world. short n sweet. hope u write more.

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    Re: Inner me

    pretty good poem..i would have to say that the soul's desire...full of hate? is someone angry at someone? = D

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