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    Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    It Looks Like You're Drowning,
    In your bed again
    Night after Night
    It's no surprise
    Thoughts racing in your mind
    What To to do the next day
    What to say to everyone
    Ay, we all play
    Do what you want
    But dont get in there way
    They'll try to hurt you
    But you gota fight back
    Get up,
    And punch them out
    No one said it was simple
    You need to be strong
    Don't cower in a corner
    Drop those bombs
    Do it like its nothing
    No one gives a damn
    Just strut around
    like your one of them
    They'll belive what they see
    But then turn right around
    And give it to them
    Make sure those blisters stay
    So they dont fade away
    They want a good kick
    You know its true
    So give 'em what they want
    And Be proud in the end
    'Cause what you did took time
    For you to realize
    They were wrong
    And you werent
    So you did what you could
    To set them right

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    Re: Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    very awesome poem i liked this alot and its true stand up something or you will fall for everything. learn this now and problems want be as big when you get older/ very cool poem i love this one
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    Nice poem! I want to chnge the first part so badly!
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    Re: Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    Quote Originally Posted by Clow Sakura
    Nice poem! I want to chnge the first part so badly!
    Care to give Star Girl some suggestions as to why you think the 'first part' must be changed?

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    Re: Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    Wee, finally something worth mentioning as good. The first verse caught my attention, the second made it waver, and the third? I never even finished.

    The amount of description in the first verse is sweet. Now, shouldnt the supporting verses be contained of some sort of description as well?
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    Re: Intimidation Got The Best Of You

    This is good! You let the person reading it really feel what's going on! I like it! Keep up the good work!

    "Look for the mischievous paw prints in the sand, and as they disappear into this earth torn land. Will they be true or stay forever blue? That's were this BlueFox will stand."

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