too many i am's iam's i am's i am's just made me wanna quit half way through it.
u need to work on this most poeple that write peoms make the same mistake so its not a biggy.
U want ur poem to have a flow, but u dont want to use the same words over and over, its veyr repiticous and annoying.
try this for example.
Something within nothing
The nothing within something
Darkness surrounded by light,
Light surrounded by darkness
The smiling sadness within paradox
Strands of nothing bound by fate
Holder of Parallel opposites
i actual like it that way, its a very unqiue poem, just needs touch ups.