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    at its end

    nothing can seperate
    me from my blade
    you're gonna wish
    that you hadnt stayed

    the bodies all cursed
    with decapatation
    the world is cursed
    with annihilation

    eveyone knew they
    could not defend
    because they where scared
    existince is at its end

    i know its short but i hope you like it

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    Re: at its end

    I wish I could feel free to go "murder, death, kill" mode on some poetry. But Im affriad Id over do it.
    You on the other hand have found the perfect balance between unleashing that fantasy of wrath. Without being to explicit.

    I deffinately wouldn't piss you off .
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: at its end

    lol thanks for the comment i actually liked a poem by atimk sprout that was similar in its basis which gave me sort of thye inspiration for this so ccheck out his poems and youll see the similarities.

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    Re: at its end

    Yeah, I read his right after he wrote it. Im one of his biggest fans. I saw the simularity in your poem as soon as I read it.
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    Re: at its end

    sweat im also one of his fans but i think his poem killed mine because of my shortnesss

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    Re: at its end

    Try not to compair. Everyone's different, and thusly expresses things differently. His was a little more emotional. And yours was a bit more brutal. Nothing wrong with that. Short. Sweet. and to the point. Just keep it up!
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    Re: at its end

    Not bad. ^_^
    I woulda made it a bit longer--y'know, add some detail to it--but it's cool.
    I hope to read more of your writing. ~S


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