its falling apart.

Noxious_Craft · Mar 26, 2007, 08:27 PM

That which I had, seems to be slipping through my fingers
Watching as it falls apart
Hopeing that maby if I try harder it will be alright
I want to fix it, I really do.

As much as I try, its still falling apart
My heart is breaking and I dont know how to stop it
I want to ask for help buy I'm afraid
Afraid I will be laughed at and rejected.

But its still falling apart, and I cant seem to stop it
I think I have given up, Im not sure
I would like to fix it but I cant seem to find the courage
Maby I should just hide.

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 26, 2007, 08:30 PM

Well I liked the poem thee are some grammatical issues but can be changed along with punctual issues. I really like how you did this poem though Noxie. I'm sorry that you are feeling this way though.

!The White Wolf · Mar 26, 2007, 08:31 PM

Grammar, punctuation, spelling O_<

But other than that.. nice poem, Noxious. I enjoyed it. You are confused. Do not know what to do. You want to simply reach out.. but even that much seems all the more complicated. I liked it. Nice job. Keep it up, and I look forward to most of your work.

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 26, 2007, 08:39 PM

Just keep your chin up Nox and all in the world will be ok. Remember that I am still here and still here for you to talk to. You can't think that I will laugh at you. When have I ever done that and I already told all my clan members I am here for you guys. I meant that. Come to me if you need someone to talk to don't keep it bottled up inside. I think that if someone laughs at you they are at blame for the way you feel.

!The White Wolf · Mar 26, 2007, 08:43 PM

Listen to ky-chan, Nox. She is always open ears. As am I. If you ever need to chat, feel free to come to any one of us. Over here, you are seen as a loved one or close friend. We look out for one another. It's what we do. I will be part of your clan soon enough, so do not hesitate to come to me as well for some advice or if you just need open ears. Can't wait to get to know you Nox. You seem like a very nice person.

Noxious_Craft · Mar 27, 2007, 09:09 PM

that you so much for your support guys, it feels good to know that people care.

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 27, 2007, 09:17 PM

Of course I care Noxie You will always be my girl no matter what...I just think that things get a little hard for you at times and that you need someone there to help you through the tough times.

*Rave_Grip* · Mar 27, 2007, 11:07 PM

I don't know what's going on with you... but if teres anything I'm here ^_^

Nice poem, but it needs working.

!The White Wolf · Mar 28, 2007, 09:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxious_Craft

that you so much for your support guys, it feels good to know that people care.

Don't worry. There will always be people here willing to help you out

Noxious_Craft · Mar 31, 2007, 06:33 PM

yeh i dont like to burned people with my problems so i dont talk about it much

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 31, 2007, 06:36 PM

It's fine we are ok with you telling us things. I mean that is what Wolf-chan and I are trying to tell you.

Mar 26, 2007, 08:27 PM	#1 (permalink)
Noxious_Craft Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: My den Posts: 304 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 248	its falling apart. That which I had, seems to be slipping through my fingers Watching as it falls apart Hopeing that maby if I try harder it will be alright I want to fix it, I really do. As much as I try, its still falling apart My heart is breaking and I dont know how to stop it I want to ask for help buy I'm afraid Afraid I will be laughed at and rejected. But its still falling apart, and I cant seem to stop it I think I have given up, Im not sure I would like to fix it but I cant seem to find the courage Maby I should just hide. __________________
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Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,069	Re: its falling apart. Well I liked the poem thee are some grammatical issues but can be changed along with punctual issues. I really like how you did this poem though Noxie. I'm sorry that you are feeling this way though. __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: its falling apart. Grammar, punctuation, spelling O_< But other than that.. nice poem, Noxious. I enjoyed it. You are confused. Do not know what to do. You want to simply reach out.. but even that much seems all the more complicated. I liked it. Nice job. Keep it up, and I look forward to most of your work.
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Mar 26, 2007, 08:39 PM	#4 (permalink)
Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,069	Re: its falling apart. Just keep your chin up Nox and all in the world will be ok. Remember that I am still here and still here for you to talk to. You can't think that I will laugh at you. When have I ever done that and I already told all my clan members I am here for you guys. I meant that. Come to me if you need someone to talk to don't keep it bottled up inside. I think that if someone laughs at you they are at blame for the way you feel. __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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Mar 26, 2007, 08:43 PM	#5 (permalink)
!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: its falling apart. Listen to ky-chan, Nox. She is always open ears. As am I. If you ever need to chat, feel free to come to any one of us. Over here, you are seen as a loved one or close friend. We look out for one another. It's what we do. I will be part of your clan soon enough, so do not hesitate to come to me as well for some advice or if you just need open ears. Can't wait to get to know you Nox. You seem like a very nice person.
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Noxious_Craft Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: My den Posts: 304 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 248	Re: its falling apart. that you so much for your support guys, it feels good to know that people care.
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Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,069	Re: its falling apart. Of course I care Noxie You will always be my girl no matter what...I just think that things get a little hard for you at times and that you need someone there to help you through the tough times. __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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Noxious_Craft Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: My den Posts: 304 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 248	Re: its falling apart. yeh i dont like to burned people with my problems so i dont talk about it much
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Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,069	Re: its falling apart. It's fine we are ok with you telling us things. I mean that is what Wolf-chan and I are trying to tell you. __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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