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    its falling apart.

    That which I had, seems to be slipping through my fingers
    Watching as it falls apart
    Hopeing that maby if I try harder it will be alright
    I want to fix it, I really do.

    As much as I try, its still falling apart
    My heart is breaking and I dont know how to stop it
    I want to ask for help buy I'm afraid
    Afraid I will be laughed at and rejected.

    But its still falling apart, and I cant seem to stop it
    I think I have given up, Im not sure
    I would like to fix it but I cant seem to find the courage
    Maby I should just hide.

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    Re: its falling apart.

    Well I liked the poem thee are some grammatical issues but can be changed along with punctual issues. I really like how you did this poem though Noxie. I'm sorry that you are feeling this way though.
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    Re: its falling apart.

    Grammar, punctuation, spelling O_<

    But other than that.. nice poem, Noxious. I enjoyed it. You are confused. Do not know what to do. You want to simply reach out.. but even that much seems all the more complicated. I liked it. Nice job. Keep it up, and I look forward to most of your work.

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    Re: its falling apart.

    Just keep your chin up Nox and all in the world will be ok. Remember that I am still here and still here for you to talk to. You can't think that I will laugh at you. When have I ever done that and I already told all my clan members I am here for you guys. I meant that. Come to me if you need someone to talk to don't keep it bottled up inside. I think that if someone laughs at you they are at blame for the way you feel.
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    Re: its falling apart.

    Listen to ky-chan, Nox. She is always open ears. As am I. If you ever need to chat, feel free to come to any one of us. Over here, you are seen as a loved one or close friend. We look out for one another. It's what we do. I will be part of your clan soon enough, so do not hesitate to come to me as well for some advice or if you just need open ears. Can't wait to get to know you Nox. You seem like a very nice person.

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    Re: its falling apart.

    that you so much for your support guys, it feels good to know that people care.

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    Re: its falling apart.

    Of course I care Noxie You will always be my girl no matter what...I just think that things get a little hard for you at times and that you need someone there to help you through the tough times.
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    Re: its falling apart.

    I don't know what's going on with you... but if teres anything I'm here ^_^

    Nice poem, but it needs working.

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