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    It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

    I'm not asking you to love me
    Not begging you to care
    We have that something special
    How i've fallen in your snare

    No can know
    What I feel so strongly for you
    When I'm in the light
    I can't even speak to you

    But the darkness hides a secret
    Of the forbidden love we share
    If she knew she would kill me

    We both have someone special
    Someone who can never know
    A person we want to spend our lives with
    But still...how did we come together

    We weren't satisfied with the chaste love of our partner
    The sweetness of their touch
    We wanted something desperate
    Something that was wrong

    I know I'm taking the easy way out
    But neither one of us wants to let go
    On shaky ground we founded this relationship
    Nothing will help this to grow

    You must understand that i love him so
    But my feelings for you run deep as well
    I can't will them away
    That would make me an empty shell

    I'm stuck falling
    Sinning
    Betraying the one I love
    Everyday...every moment

    What I'm doing is so sick
    But god only knows how fun
    Its dirty but so intoxicating
    Its dangerous and i love that thrill

    Am I even human?
    To betray someone this way?
    To cause so much pain
    Bring on so much suffering
    For the sake of a few moments of pleasure each day

    I was looking so despretly to fill a void that wasn't there
    I need to pay for my sins
    Atone for my error
    I'm ready to confess
    Ready to repent

    I'm ready to die
    To give back what I have taken away
    I don't want to hurt him anymore
    So here is the blade

    I wanted to say this
    Wanted to say goodbye
    Maybe you'll see me on the other side
    And maybe by then you will have forgiven me

    Though disgusting I have proved to be
    I do love you
    The both of you
    And my feelings were real

    But all I wanted to say was goodbye
    And I'm sorry...



    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

    What an amazing poem it really touched me. Makes me think about some of my past relashionships.

    Keep up the good work, i'd love to read another.



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    Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

    O_O
    oh wow.

    that was great. you really know how to express yourself. my only problem though was that the flow of it was a little difficult to get through it. but other than that it was great.

    i felt so much emotion from reading it. its just great. keep up the great work.
    ^^

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    Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

    Defiantly not my type of poem, to sad and depressing. I wanna see happy and joyful ! Anyway other than the fact its depressing its pretty good, the flow might need a little work but i know you can better yourself .

    As always love the picture you add in the poem...
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    Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

    I really liked this poem. Although it didn't flow as nicely as I wished it would have I really got the overall feeling through it anyways.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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