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    Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~
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    I'm really sick of it all...
    It sickens the soul and eats away at your heart
    I love everyone but they are all just jokes that prey on your every move
    They live by hurting you...

    What am i saying it's all just cover up realy, because i seen someone who looked like her. Today and i was really upset if only i had confessed earlier to her.
    I use to ride the bus with her everyday, when she was sick i felt down.

    When she was happy i was happy.
    When i felt bad she felt bad.

    I knewn she liked me but yet i did nothin. We had a argument one day.
    An the next day she wasn't on the bus... she had moved away.
    It tore me apart truly it did. I couldn't eat. I lost alot of memories
    of my childhood.

    People where mere vessels to me now. Just sacks awaiting certain descruction.

    But i missed her so much I want to be with her... I wanted nothin more.
    It hurts me even now as i type these words are becoming blurry.

    Please i beg you never turn your back on the one you love for no mans sake.
    Please here me out and listen to my heart's cry.

    I am so full of angusish it is undescribable. I comptiplaited the inevitable before.
    But i would never do such a thing, because of the chance of seeing her agian.
    Please don't ever make her cry.
    Or jade will die.
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    This is based on true events' I bear my soul, for all to see.
    I know not alot of love poems, this is more of a tragic story. Sorry for any spelling errors.
    -Just another green eyed angel, distorted by mans love for hate-
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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    I don't know what to use, bravo or sad ... T_T

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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    tragic indeed, well written as well. other than that i don't know what else to say...

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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    Thank you, i made this poem 2 years ago. I was walking along and finally remmebered what had happened to me and just started crying and wrote that.
    i was too embarrased to let anyone read it T_T

    Not the kind of crying where i was bawling my eyes out, but... i just started to remember her face and, the tears just came.
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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    I am emotionally touched, Jade. What can I say? I am proud to witness a case of true love, but I am sorry, buddy. A gripping poem, de facto! Great title, it served it purpose to summate the meaning of the poem. Keep up the great work!!!

    EDIT: Never seen so emotional. She must be extremely important to you!

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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    Hmmmm, very very very emotional...extremely emotional, and quite direct too without any hidden feelings I think, nice, to the point and well, can relate to those who have lived these kinds of emotions.

    Thought I prefer things with hidden meanings, I do understand somewhat what's going through your mind maybe...or not, but well, I felt something, so that something can be related too XD

    I hope this isn't bothersome of a remark, just saying what I think and feel :P
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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    Wow, thats an awesome piece of work.......definitely depressing, but still awesome Poems based on a poets true and sincere feelings always have a genuine touch to it......really touches the reader's soul......

    Great job
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    Re: Jade try's :D ~True To Heart, Dark SouL~

    I like it. This is why I like free verse, it's brings out so much more expressions.

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