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    Jelayna

    A friend i would have to the end
    She's the one i would take a bullet for

    We've been besties since seventh grade
    and still are as sophmores in highschool

    She's one i can truly depond when i'm in trouble
    I can always come to here and share my struggles
    no matter how bad

    Both of us been through alot, with guys, school, drama and "future planing"
    but we've been there for each other
    through thick and thin

    Bad times and the good, i wouldn't
    trade our friendship for the world!

    ______
    LOVE U JAY ^^
    I'm the best you'll ever have because i am that f*ing AMA-zing chic who can stand on her own d*n feet and becasue of you I am the Greatest Thank you so much SasuraiHell and Gwen

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    Re: Jelayna

    Awww...........that was so sweet!!!!!!!!!!
    Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: Jelayna

    Mm, not bad. To make your poem a little more interesting, maybe you could add more spark to it. For example, lengthen it a little. Overall, it is a fine poem. ^_^
    Last edited by Tifa Lockhart; Oct 31, 2007 at 08:40 PM.

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    Re: Jelayna

    Quote Originally Posted by Tifa Lockhart View Post
    Mm, not bad. To make your poem a little more interesting, maybe you could add more spark to it. For example, lengthen it a little. Overall, it is a find poem. ^_^
    thank you for the comment^-^ i appreciate it thank you
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    Re: Jelayna

    Aww ^^ this is sooo sweet!!! I must write one like that to all my friends!!!! Wait.. I think I really will ^^ I bet it's just wonderful to get something like that ^^

    It's really, really nice. ^^ The only suggestion- create a bit more of rhythm in it and then it will be just great ^^ Really, really nice and sweet! I hope to see more ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Jelayna

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Aww ^^ this is sooo sweet!!! I must write one like that to all my friends!!!! Wait.. I think I really will ^^ I bet it's just wonderful to get something like that ^^

    It's really, really nice. ^^ The only suggestion- create a bit more of rhythm in it and then it will be just great ^^ Really, really nice and sweet! I hope to see more ^^
    i agree with you Lasura it's a sweet poem and she could creat a bit more rhythm in it^^
    anyway...good work sis^^hope to see more from you

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