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Reply With QuoteI like it Ichigo but the word flow could be a little better. ^_^ other than that I think it's pretty good and I would love to see more from you.
You see a friend in need,
You know your mood is down,
The way you know to get it back,
Is to help the friend in need.
You ask them if they want help,
They tell you what is wrong,
Knowing you might not be able to help,
You try your best anyways.
After finding the facts,
And Searching wide,
You come to a conclusion,
Your happy that you made it.
You let your friends know,
And they become happy you found it.
After all you did you made your friend happy,
Which in turn made you happy.
Sorry for the quick and sudden return of my poems, this one is a bit on the week side, but yeah anyways hope you guys like it! I will try to post more soon
ナサン フォオツド
Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever!
Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
I like it Ichigo but the word flow could be a little better. ^_^ other than that I think it's pretty good and I would love to see more from you.
X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X
X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X
pretty good! not you best but, not your worst either. the flow was a little shakey. good jod though
it was good to read . the intresting as well .
do what you know that make you happy
dont force yourself to be happy
witch i tell all the time and alway & in what you choose.
hope to see more from you
Thank you, all three of you, I am glad you guys liked it even though it was one of my weaker ones.
ナサン フォオツド
Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever!
Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
Over all......you did a splendid job......but the rhythm and the flow could be a little bit better......
But the words by themselves go perfect with the title
DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
I agree. This IS a very well written piece of work, it's just kinda jumbled up--as far as the flow of the poem is concerned. But, none-the-less, this isn't weak by any means.Originally Posted by BrokenLover101
Keep up the good work, my friend. And what's with the gap in log-ins lately? I've been wonderin' where ya been.
it is really good, it remind me of one of my friens. She is always trying to help others
Do not dwell in the past... do not wonder about the future... just life the present to the fullness...
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