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    Judgment Day

    Standing before the gates that keep rolling,
    And the Guardian that guards that endless door.
    In the nowhere for me they'are calling,
    And singing forgiveness from the bottom .. from that core ...

    It is a call from the death that's howling.
    It is when the world becomes nothing more.
    Lying in the shadows that always keep falling,
    When time stops and you don't know is it after? .. is it before? ...

    I see light ... is it lightening? .. is it sunlight beam?
    Is it a red ash i'm standing upon? or is it a green field?
    Feeling everything yet nothing like a gathering in one big ream
    Now everything is to halt .. time is to be sealed

    I thought i was sleeping and that was only a dream
    But i soon realized my injury my sins that can't be healed
    It was the only path before me .. the only walkable stream
    It was my truth that was like a measure that i alone wield ...
    Last edited by LichGRIFFIN; Nov 08, 2007 at 07:18 AM. Reason: correcting some grammar mistakes
    Life and Death are always one and the same
    EVEN IF A RAINBOW IS BROKEN THERE'S STILL THE SKY

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    Re: Judgment Day

    Standing before the gates that keeps rolling,
    And the Guardian that guards that endless door
    i dont understand this part much...but i guess it is something in your imagination..hope you will give better description though..it's too vague...

    Ooh...nice.. you speak of the end of the days... nicely written... and the description were nice... but it's incomplete to me.. nice try... but it was a very good poem.. good effort.. keep it up ^^

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    Re: Judgment Day

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post


    i dont understand this part much...but i guess it is something in your imagination..hope you will give better description though..it's too vague...

    Ooh...nice.. you speak of the end of the days... nicely written... and the description were nice... but it's incomplete to me.. nice try... but it was a very good poem.. good effort.. keep it up ^^
    thanx it is my first of this type ,because my original language isn't english i used to write poems in a different way other than this one ,but when i saw poems here in AO i was surprised because they were written in a different way so this's my first attempt here and of this type .... plus endless door means exactly something we can't know something beyond our imagination it is not width not height something else it is supposed to be vague in a way,keeps rolling = never ending
    Last edited by LichGRIFFIN; Nov 07, 2007 at 06:56 AM. Reason: adding more detailed opinion
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    Re: Judgment Day

    WOW I love your poem it may be your first but it's pretty good for a first poem.

    Hope it aint your last poem though.



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    Re: Judgment Day

    I really like it.... The imagery seems to have so much fantacy and imagination.
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    Re: Judgment Day

    Good work, mate. I hope you translate more of those gems . . .

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    Re: Judgment Day

    It was great! i loved it! I was just a bit confused, but when am i not! Any who keep up the good work!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: Judgment Day

    Hey Griff so this is your first poem,
    well I must say that it is very good.
    don't worry I am also new to writing them.
    but mine are short because I cannot write long ones,
    so again I sayeth well done.

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