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    Just a...


    Just a whore

    She's not my girl
    But she loves like she is
    Greets me with a smile
    I lead her into my room
    As she gets ready
    To stay for a while

    I examine her body
    Flaws, non-existent
    As she lays on my bed
    Just like a human
    She kisses my lips
    The lie is easily read

    She's not my girl
    And she's not human
    But I do know what she is
    She's just a whore
    And nothing more
    Who can lie through a kiss

    Late that night
    I call her again
    Somewhat miss that sin
    The phone clicks by accident
    I can hear the whore
    Once again with him



    I kind of like this poem
    It's unique.
    It has a different feel.
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    Re: Just a...

    It is unique indeed.
    I like it,it show alot of feeling towards the girl^^

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    Re: Just a...

    nice i like it.
    it has alot of meaning towards it.

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    Re: Just a...

    It is a unique poem!!!! Very unique!!!! I love how you wrote and say who this girl is!!!! To me it seems so deep in a way! I love it! I hope to see more!
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    Re: Just a...

    Wow! I thought this was very good... very very good.

    It was relentless... just bluntly calling the girl a whore! And still, you do your business with her... knowing shes a whore! You don't even give her the luxery of humanity, like a whore is less than human...

    The best part, is that you never fall into her illusion... Its more like she falls into yours...
    Last edited by Peach_follows; Jul 17, 2007 at 01:38 PM.
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