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Jul 17, 2007, 12:18 PM
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 Credits: 110 | Just a... Just a whore She's not my girl But she loves like she is Greets me with a smile I lead her into my room As she gets ready To stay for a while I examine her body Flaws, non-existent As she lays on my bed Just like a human She kisses my lips The lie is easily read She's not my girl And she's not human But I do know what she is She's just a whore And nothing more Who can lie through a kiss Late that night I call her again Somewhat miss that sin The phone clicks by accident I can hear the whore Once again with him I kind of like this poem It's unique. It has a different feel. Comments, Questions, Concerns?
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Jul 17, 2007, 12:22 PM
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 Diamond in the Rough  Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Somewhere over the RAINBOW
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Credits: 1,700 | Re: Just a... It is unique indeed. I like it,it show alot of feeling towards the girl^^
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Jul 17, 2007, 12:58 PM
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| Diamond in the Rough  Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: ontario, canada
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Credits: 2,187 | Re: Just a... nice i like it. it has alot of meaning towards it.
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Jul 17, 2007, 01:24 PM
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| ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡  Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart
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Credits: 13,226 | Re: Just a... It is a unique poem!!!! Very unique!!!! I love how you wrote and say who this girl is!!!! To me it seems so deep in a way! I love it! I hope to see more! 
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Jul 17, 2007, 02:21 PM
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 Moving right along....  Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley
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Credits: 3,512 | Re: Just a... Wow! I thought this was very good... very very good. It was relentless... just bluntly calling the girl a whore! And still, you do your business with her... knowing shes a whore! You don't even give her the luxery of humanity, like a whore is less than human... The best part, is that you never fall into her illusion... Its more like she falls into yours...
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