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    Just A Dream

    Being with you is a dream
    If only this heartbreak weren't a reality
    The miles I walk to clear my mind of you
    It's all just a dream, I steadily remind myself
    "Forget him", these words echo in my head
    What if my heart won't listen though?
    It seems you know it won't
    That's when I realize what I feared was the facts
    I fell so fast I forgot to take things slow
    In other words I was a perfect target
    Look me in the eyes and feel my pain
    Tell me you're sorry for the hurt that I feel
    Even though my heart was blind, my eyes saw it all
    Nothing can be taken back, especially the hurt
    They always say "Time heals all"
    The timer will be set for when my heart can cope without you
    One thing is funny, or at least it will be
    Someday in the future I'll find the one that replaces you... in my dreams


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    Re: Just A Dream

    i like it, it all goes well together ^^

    my most favorite line was this

    I fell so fast I forgot to take things slow
    In other words I was a perfect target


    good job

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    Re: Just A Dream

    Thank you very much it means a lot to know I'm still good at writing poems

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    Re: Just A Dream

    I love your poem.
    You justs told a part of my life if i was a girl and time does heal all but sometime it takes longer then you except.
    I is a very good poem. Great job on it.

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