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    Kanpai!

    Slowly I walk down the same ol' street.
    With the same pair of Nike's on my sweaty feet.
    I turn on my tunes and I start to dance.
    Because my block is now vacant, so I take my chance.

    Switch to the next track! My favorite from Rip Slyme.
    The song makes ya think, "How long am I wasting my time?"
    It's a pretty Jazzy song which makes me groove to the beat,
    and it puts more sweat between the toes of my feet. ^_^

    It's times like this I wish I had a car.
    Because I don't like to catch the bus to play DDR.
    Then I pause for a second--a thought becomes apparent.
    I can go to down the street and play that game with Erik!

    So I make a change of plans and I turn around.
    I'm glad that I live on the border of that town!
    I arrive and then there's another change of plan.
    He says, "Let's go on a run to get some sake, man!"

    I agree and I put my sweaty shoes back on.
    It's about a block away, it won't take too long.
    Buy the sake, then go back to where Erik resides.
    Heat it up before we drink, raise your glass and KANPAI!!

    *Not my best poem, but it's not my worst either, LOL*


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    Re: Kanpai!

    I agree you have better, but this is ok!!!^^ something really relaxing and fun, nothing serious, just life from a simple point of view, the only serious and sad fraze was "The song makes ya think, "How long am I wasting my time?"" It's cool...

    Enjoyed reading it... the right thing to readd before you go to sleep to save you from unneed thoughts about love or life and death...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Kanpai!

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    I agree you have better, but this is ok!!!^^ something really relaxing and fun, nothing serious, just life from a simple point of view, the only serious and sad fraze was "The song makes ya think, "How long am I wasting my time?"" It's cool...

    Enjoyed reading it... the right thing to readd before you go to sleep to save you from unneed thoughts about love or life and death...
    Well, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. ^_^
    I was just sitting here--bored--and I hadn't written in a couple of days, so I figured I'd give writing at random a try. Usually I have to be inspired by something, or have something dramatic goin' on around me, but today, I just wrote for the sake of writing. I dunno if that makes any sense, but yeah. It's probably why it's not as good as most.

    Thanks for your comment! It's always a pleasure.


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    Re: Kanpai!

    Ehh... yea, understand- for the sake of writing- not as senceless as might seem it is... indeed this time it just doesn't have all the emotions in it... I've noticed you put a lot of them in your poems- by reading yout poems a persone can find out everything about your life...

    And I'm always glad to hear my coments are a pleasure not a torment... ^^

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    Re: Kanpai!

    I appreciate the efforts made to tell stories in your work lately. Im impressed, and inspired. To me that aspect, combined with the ability to rhyme and compose words with rythm... is what poetrys all about. AND... all that sweaty foot talk creates some seriously disturbing imagery... 'specially since Ive smelled those dogs before. Perhaps you should invest in some flip-flops. Y'know, get some air in dem b*tches.
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    Re: Kanpai!

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I appreciate the efforts made to tell stories in your work lately. Im impressed, and inspired. To me that aspect, combined with the ability to rhyme and compose words with rythm... is what poetrys all about. AND... all that sweaty foot talk creates some seriously disturbing imagery... 'specially since Ive smelled those dogs before. Perhaps you should invest in some flip-flops. Y'know, get some air in dem b*tches.
    Aww, then who's gonna wear my beautiful Forces? LOL.

    I'm glad you liked my poem. It's not everyday I get a comment of this calibur from you, so I kinda feel good about my writing now. Especially since I wasn't really pleased with this one. Thanks! ^_^


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