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Reply With Quote*claps* that was a nice poem man, keep it up man.
The time it has passed and evrything is gone
what to do,where to go,what to say ,it's all
meaningless now. It's true i did say i love you
Its true i promiced you my love but time's
have changed nothing and last's forever my feeling's
they arn't the same.
These tears you think they are for you! but there
not there for life a life that i thought i could change
it sound's cruel to you i know but i am being honest
with myself and you should see this and not have anger
for my life .
As i walk away from you i hear the word's you
speak but my heart shut's them out the love i have
for you is forever locked away never to come out
then i drift away for ever never looking back
the life i have chosen has engulfed my life
completley.....And then i am gone.
i hope this poem is a bit better than the last one i posted
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
*claps* that was a nice poem man, keep it up man.
This sounds like a confession. Or a diary entry. But i like it. Your clearly venting out frustration but calmly. A few grammer errors. But it was still pretty good. Maybe you should put it more in depth.
I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.
yea....i agree with nympho...
it's a bit messy...but i like it 7/10
I guess it's more better than the last one..... Gives you a four stars ranking.....
HolderOfTheDarkChalice (Feb 03, 2010)
wow that was the best poem I've ever seen in a while thats really impressive keep it up
I live in the shadows and I am as fast as the speed of light, but I use my ability's to help people even though they fear me for who I am.
A Brand new Theme song for all my friends who use to come to Ao and the People that still come's to Ao.
http://video.freevideoblog.com/hotte...7631ca1c2a.htm
I can see where the start n end of a stanza is but u dont actually do it. I kinda agree with the girls here. It's more a mish mash of wut ur feeling. I mean it is possible to create a poem of wut ur feeling but u have to try and make so relatable (tht is a word at all) tht ur readers actually understand it. Anyways, not the best i've seen so far but not bad either. 7/10 i would give it. Keep improving u might be able to create a perfect flowing poem
Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
That was good and don't take it the wrong way, But I think I heard better please don't take it the wrong way
Thank you soooo much equinn for leting me us this pic of your!!!!!
This is a cute little clip:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PrZQIayUnbA
My favorite song:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8frvSHvlzSM
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