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    Killing me...

    It’s all because of you.
    Because of you I lie here-
    Crying... Dying...
    Because of you my life seems empty…
    Heart breaking… Killing…

    I want to be happy too!
    Loving… Longing….
    But I’m just nothing…
    Crying… Dying…

    You don’t care… indeed you don’t… You’re
    Torturing… Strangling…
    And I can’t let go…
    Blinded… Chained…

    Stop avoiding me!
    Hiding… Silenting…
    Tell everything you fell, even if it’s
    Nothing… Hurting…Cheating…

    I can’t let go and it’s
    Torturing! Strangling!
    Why do I live my life
    Crying!? Dying!?

    I’m lonely… cold rain- washing away my hot tears... emptiness- my only friend… YOU- my only fear!!!! (I know you’ll kill me… kill me with your sad eyes… kill me with your angry words…)
    Leave me… leave me to cry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Hold me… hold me and make me "safe, warm and loved"...

    And a wallpaper releated to this:
    http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/58673
    Last edited by Lasura; May 31, 2007 at 01:21 PM.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Killing me...

    Amazing poem!!!! Theres like so many emotions in it!!! Well to me which makes me love this poem so much!!!!! I hope to see more of your great work!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Killing me...

    Thank You so much Kuwi!!!! I'm happy you like it... Yes, I guess there are many feeling in it though mostly sadness...
    Oh, and that poem is related to a wallpaper here:
    http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/58673 Got to put it in the first post also, I guess...

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    Re: Killing me...

    I am astonished!!! ^_^ This poem rocks my socks. So much raw emotion, it's like I felt what you were writing. And your word-play is awesome! Keep up the good work, Lasura! ^_^


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    Thank You sprout!!!! This means a lot to me!!!
    Well... yes, people say so always when I writte in moments I have many strong feelings in me, that's the good thing in being emotional I guess... Thank You!!!! Thank you so much!!!
    Word play... I adopted it from a Tolkiens poem...

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    Re: Killing me...

    hmmm...this poem has a nice kick too it...lots of strong emotion...very nice.keep it up! its nice to see poems like this.your poems are coming from the same direction as mine! its so nice to not feel so alone... :')
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    Re: Killing me...

    Quote Originally Posted by fallenangel25 View Post
    hmmm...this poem has a nice kick too it...lots of strong emotion...very nice.keep it up! its nice to see poems like this.your poems are coming from the same direction as mine! its so nice to not feel so alone... :')
    Indeed it is nice not to feel alone... Thank you for this comment, I'm happy to hear you like it... I like your poems too and indeed, they are alike...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Killing me...

    Mm... On a whole, what makes an impression on me is the raw emotion. I like the way you go :-

    "(word)... (word)"...
    Makes a bigger emphasis on your feelings...

    But the last 'paragraph' doesn't exactly... 'flow' with the poem. It's suddenly one big chunk of words, even though it contributes a lot to the feel of the poem...

    Hello! Sorry that I haven't gotten the chance to post a comment on any of your poems, after you commented on mine a long time ago...

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