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Reply With Quote...I'm not really sure what to say....
I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry...it confuzzles me >.<
Seriously now though...good rhyming skills, and it had a really nice flow.
Over all, I thought it was pretty good poem ^-^
It kills me inside to
know that you don't care.
But I don't either...
So we're even there.
The one thing we DO
care about is why we fight.
Which is funny because it
shouldn't even be happening, right?
It kills me inside to
know that you think
an apology will fix
everything in a blink.
The one thing that CAN
fix this: Drop the past.
Otherwise it'll come back
and bite you in the ass!
It kills me inside to know
you're happy with his confusion.
Any other guy would probably
lend you a couple of bruises.
The one thing in my life
that really matters to me
and I'm stuck looking like
a major in douche-baggery.
I'm dying to know why
this has even continued.
Like Gatorade, the ability
to let go: Is it in you?
Because it's kiling me to
know you simply don't care.
But neither do I, so
I guess we're even there.
...I'm not really sure what to say....
I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry...it confuzzles me >.<
Seriously now though...good rhyming skills, and it had a really nice flow.
Over all, I thought it was pretty good poem ^-^
"I'm a young soul in this very strange world hoping to learn a bit bout' what is true and fake"
atomik_sprout (Feb 18, 2008)
Yeah, I wasn't sure which route to take in this poem. I really wanted to be funny, but quickly changed my mind, but then decided not to write such depressing poetry. So, I met myself halfway and this is what I came up with.Originally Posted by Echo
I'm glad you like it and appreciate your taking the time to read my work. Thanx!
Well you're very welcome, and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Funny poetry always makes me happy :]
Which is weird considering I don't write any myself...I am just not that good at writing funny poetry...I am better with serious stuff lol.
"I'm a young soul in this very strange world hoping to learn a bit bout' what is true and fake"
Hey, ya never know until you try a few times. I used to suck at writing, period. I couldn't write a likeable poem, let alone a funny one, but after a few months of broken pencils and crumpled sheets of paper, here I am sharing it with everyone here on AO.
"He who dares, wins." Hassun told me that once. I don't know exactly where it's from, but it's stuck with me.
Thats true...I never thought of it that way before...thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it :]
Yeah I know what you mean about crumpled sheets of paper and broken pencils, I go through alot of that..so you're not alone on that one lol.
"I'm a young soul in this very strange world hoping to learn a bit bout' what is true and fake"
I liked the sentiment I got from this one. Well written, unrepetitive and a nice flow.
Mind mailing me and telling me what it's about and all. We haven't talked in a while.
You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!
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