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    Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    It kills me inside to
    know that you don't care.
    But I don't either...
    So we're even there.

    The one thing we DO
    care about is why we fight.
    Which is funny because it
    shouldn't even be happening, right?

    It kills me inside to
    know that you think
    an apology will fix
    everything in a blink.

    The one thing that CAN
    fix this: Drop the past.
    Otherwise it'll come back
    and bite you in the ass!

    It kills me inside to know
    you're happy with his confusion.
    Any other guy would probably
    lend you a couple of bruises.

    The one thing in my life
    that really matters to me
    and I'm stuck looking like
    a major in douche-baggery.

    I'm dying to know why
    this has even continued.
    Like Gatorade, the ability
    to let go: Is it in you?

    Because it's kiling me to
    know you simply don't care.
    But neither do I, so
    I guess we're even there.


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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    ...I'm not really sure what to say....
    I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry...it confuzzles me >.<
    Seriously now though...good rhyming skills, and it had a really nice flow.
    Over all, I thought it was pretty good poem ^-^
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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    Quote Originally Posted by Echo View Post
    ...I'm not really sure what to say....
    I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry...it confuzzles me >.<
    Seriously now though...good rhyming skills, and it had a really nice flow.
    Over all, I thought it was pretty good poem ^-^
    Yeah, I wasn't sure which route to take in this poem. I really wanted to be funny, but quickly changed my mind, but then decided not to write such depressing poetry. So, I met myself halfway and this is what I came up with.

    I'm glad you like it and appreciate your taking the time to read my work. Thanx!


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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    Well you're very welcome, and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Funny poetry always makes me happy :]

    Which is weird considering I don't write any myself...I am just not that good at writing funny poetry...I am better with serious stuff lol.
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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    Quote Originally Posted by Echo View Post
    Well you're very welcome, and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Funny poetry always makes me happy :]

    Which is weird considering I don't write any myself...I am just not that good at writing funny poetry...I am better with serious stuff lol.
    Hey, ya never know until you try a few times. I used to suck at writing, period. I couldn't write a likeable poem, let alone a funny one, but after a few months of broken pencils and crumpled sheets of paper, here I am sharing it with everyone here on AO.

    "He who dares, wins." Hassun told me that once. I don't know exactly where it's from, but it's stuck with me.


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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    Thats true...I never thought of it that way before...thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it :]
    Yeah I know what you mean about crumpled sheets of paper and broken pencils, I go through alot of that..so you're not alone on that one lol.
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    Re: Killing me inside! (Or: Is it in you?)

    I liked the sentiment I got from this one. Well written, unrepetitive and a nice flow.

    Mind mailing me and telling me what it's about and all. We haven't talked in a while.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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