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    Killing you is sweet.

    Here is another poem that i wrote. I actually was in a good mood when i wrote this, i hope you all like it.
    The day I took your life.
    There was a full moon that night.
    Your screams of pain were like a sirens song.
    A song that you kept singing all night long.

    I slowly intended to make you suffer.
    In spite of this, you had an offer.
    I asked what is it?
    You said “just kill me”

    I hectically laughed.
    Then, you started to cry.
    I said “sweetheart don’t worry”
    It is blissful that I can kill you slowly
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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    you were in a good mood? wow, lol, did you love her that much?
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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    wow this one is very dark and thw way you talk
    about killing them slowly is really romantic and shows
    the affection you woant to give them , well yeah i know
    what you were getting at but the you wrte it was almost
    like a romance that went wrong.

    very awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    You are eeeeevil! Evil I tell You!!!
    The poem is really good, I like it very much... You were in a good mood when writting this? Amazing!!! A wonderful work and your idea in this... wonderful, I could never think about writing a poem like this one and it's really good for It made it so interestting for me!!!

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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    I thought it was a bit weird that the poem started as a rhyming poem, but then it stopped rhyming in the middle and end.
    However the subject matter compensates... I thought it was morbidly hilarious that you wrote about killing someone. And I could see how you were in a good mood. Heck, you put ME in a good mood! Good job!
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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    Haha, yeah I agree with peaches ^^ Tho dark and scary, it seems to have a hint of amusement for me O_O Wait this has gotta do with romance?!?! *Goes read it again* I can't find any >.> Am i suppose to read between the lines @_@? I don't get it Well, overall the blood red fonts did it's job Such a dark and short poem. Keep it up.

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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    This poem does not have a good flow to it, in my opinion. It could be so much better with or without the rhyming, but here it seemed as if you were confused as to what you wanted to do with it. Try having it rhyme, or not rhyming at all and see where it takes you. What it does to the poem.

    Great work Ketaro. Keep it up.

    Oh. And it sounds as if you were a psycho killer writing down thoughts or occurances in your diary. It gave chills down my spine.

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    Re: Killing you is sweet.

    Hey, thank you all for your comments. I haven't written poems for about 2 years so, i am kinda losing my poetic touch. I guess from now on i might only write about killings, suicides, and love relationships gone bloody.

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