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    the knight of light

    the knight of light...

    Woke up in a cold sweat
    Fear is knocking on my door
    Death is outside my window
    Pain is in my bed..

    My prince lies in a deep slumber
    Shouldn't my kiss of love save him?
    placing a kiss on his lips
    his body under goes a change..


    His tender looks comes more clear
    He awakes and grabs me
    kisses my lips and makes me feel safe but
    also make me wonder about his love for me..

    Since i let him in
    my dark sky turn clear,
    the darkness in my heart goes away
    he became my knight of light and
    the prince of my world..
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    Re: the knight of light

    That was beautiful. I can just imagine the scene with the knight. I love it! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: the knight of light

    OOoooOOOooOOO! ^^ Such a catchy title already!

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    Quote Originally Posted by ryomakurosaki View Post
    His tender looks comes more clear
    He awakes and grabs me
    kisses my lips and makes me feel safe but
    also make me wonder about his love for me..


    Since i let him in
    my dark sky turn clear,
    the darkness in my heart goes away
    he became my knight of light and
    the prince of my world..
    How romantic of you oneechan! ^^ You'll always be a pro with these poems. I like this poem like your others cause they mostly deal with love. ^^ Plus it always has a great flow to me when I read it as well. Hope to see another ok!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Priestess Angel View Post
    That was beautiful. I can just imagine the scene with the knight. I love it! Keep up the good work!
    thank you^^ i am told i have a good sense of imaginary in my writing ^^ and am glad you enjoyed the poem^^ i wished i had more details in my poem though but i guess it is still good without all that ^^

    Quote Originally Posted by KuwiRules145 View Post
    OOoooOOOooOOO! ^^ Such a catchy title already!

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    How romantic of you oneechan! ^^ You'll always be a pro with these poems. I like this poem like your others cause they mostly deal with love. ^^ Plus it always has a great flow to me when I read it as well. Hope to see another ok!
    lol thank you kuwi^^ i am glad my writing is the type you like^^ yea i am ok with writing about love. yea i liked those parts as well.
    i am glad it had a good flow because i don't want people getting tangled within the poem^^

    again thank you guys for the wonderful comments^^
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    Re: the knight of light

    nice love poem indeed ... the parts that were vague and obscure played their role well ... it's not always the clear poems that takes the first place ... that's what i think ..
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