Kurushimi- Random Love Poems <3

Random stuff? Post your own if you want...


Don't leave me
Don't fear me
Don't decieve me
Don't sigh.

Don't laugh with tears
falling from your eyes
Because you know
I'd rather die

Than to see you
See me
The way you do
In your eyes

The tears fall
like the rain falls
from each of us

And I know now
that you know
it's over:
for good

And you know,
Just for now
I don't mind
if you lie

Just tell me
You'll love me
and hold me
forever

But now I know
The truth untold
That you never will,
But instead

You'll leave me
You'll fear me
You'll lie to me

You'll sigh to me
and cry to me
and say
that you'd rather die

And as the tears fall
like the rain falls
my sight is blurred

And I no longer
see you
the way
I once did

Because you left me
you feared me
you lied to me

You sighed to me
you cried to me
and I died

And it's all over
no longer
will I search for love

For it's love's fault;
the pain
will never end

Love grabs your heart
and it's grip so strong
it leaves an imprint

And if your love should die
your heart's source is dry
and It will too

And that's why
I will not
Fall for you
or anyone

And I cannot
believe myself
because I just did

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hey it's a basic and balanced poem.. im all right with it..

It was good, I think it would have been a whole lot better if you would have used more variety in your word choice. You used the same words a lot in this poem.

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Originally Posted by Zev

It was good, I think it would have been a whole lot better if you would have used more variety in your word choice. You used the same words a lot in this poem.

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Thank you. I've actually never written any poems before, so I'm really inexperienced... Teehee?

I was kind of going for more of a song format, with a motif. I don't really know much about how to do it though. I guess I'll practice? ;3

The light was leeking through the curtains;
A sight that should have calmed my heart.
But the night was creeping and I was certain;
A fright ripped my head apart.
The loneliness was staggering,
And the room was oh so cold.
So tell me why is it- that this warmth feels so old?
Your arms conceal my fragility,
Your feelings combine with mine.
This darkness has no pull on me
for we have stopped the time