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    Lady

    I dedicate this poem to all of the parents out there and their daughters;


    Ever since you came into my life, you've filled me with pride
    From the day of your birth to when you learned to drive
    Days turn into months, months turn into years
    I'm unable to count all the laughter and tears

    Now, from my lips, the truth must be torn
    No longer can I hold you, like the day you were born
    Magically you transform from a duckling to a swan
    Just as if it were from a flick of a magician's wand

    Floating through the room at your own steady pace
    Proving to everyone that you have your own grace
    Seeing you now, I know that you are ready
    To show to the world that you are a lady.

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    Re: Lady

    You did an amazing job with this poem....
    The first thing that stand out is the rhythm.....it is absolutely perfect and never falters throughout the poem...
    Also the usage of words and grammar.....
    I especially like the line
    "Magically you transform from a duckling to a swan"....
    very beautiful words....
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: Lady

    Thank u for that wonderful comment. I have been a big fan of Shakepearian quatraines since as far back as I can remember and I love how he uses his words in them. I often seek ta immulate that.

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    Re: Lady

    Dude, this is well written! I like the flow and love the theme! You really did a great job here. This poem really illustrates how most parents feel as their younglings start to grow up. Kudos, my friend!

    BTW, are you a parent? If so, that's news to me, LOL!


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    Re: Lady

    Unfortunately, I cannot have any kids, so unless I adopt; I will never have any. Yet I understand how a parent feels, 'cause I've helped ta raise my niece and nephew since the time that they were born 'til 'bout 2 years ago. I remember how I felt durin' that time, which inspired me ta write this poem. Anyways, thnx for the compliment on the poem. I try ta write them as they come.

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