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    Land of Sires.

    Land of Sires.

    Fire emerged in dust and toil,
    Blood and corpses laid to soil.
    Crow governed open graves,
    Soul imprisoned death slaves.

    Tragedy wrought loved ones,
    Beloved lost fathers and sons.
    Pain inflicted heart breakings,
    Surefire angry hostile makings.

    Country men dreadfully dedicated,
    Warfare learned and educated.
    Threatening merciless hate.
    A pledge to an enemy’s fate.

    Retaliation to wrongful oppression
    High hopes of righteous succession.
    Secret oppositions, sure revolution.
    Battle ready men for resolution.

    Taken swords, shields, and spears.
    Heeding not their forefather’s fears.
    Trudging on to honorable war.
    Songs sang of battle lore.

    Armor clashed with many dead.
    Life faded in the night of dread.
    But victory came with high desires.
    And peace ruled the Land of Sires.
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    Re: Land of Sires.

    Very nice use of the rhyme scheme. I actually enjoyed reading this poem and the title caught my eye.
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    Re: Land of Sires.

    I really like this poem! It's wonderful and full of blood and glory. I love the theme and the way you expressed the idea is great too! A really good job!!!! You made me forget about Tolkien for a while!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Land of Sires.

    This is top notch poem, very nicely written using well thought out rhyme and syntax. I would have liked to seen this submitted for the POTW...


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    Re: Land of Sires.

    Well... Maby next time then? o.0.. or does the poem HAVE to written during that week. And how? I suppose I should check the POTW faq for that answer.

    Anyway, thanks for the compliment, and I'll see what I can to enter next week.
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