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    Unhappy At last...

    i've been fooled by a man like you
    you've given me great pain in my heart
    seeing you go, it thought was better
    better enough to erase you in my heart

    but then again, feelings remained
    a year has passed yet I still waited
    just one smile and i'll be in heaven
    just one glance and i'll reach the sky

    been always waiting for that chance
    to see you visit or to see you go again
    i know that we'll never be together
    but i just want to see you for the last time

    I never thought that my wish had been heard
    but that wish was a big mistake
    i just did it again, broke my own heart
    tears in my eyes poured down like heavy rain

    it was unexpected yet it's very clear
    clear to me, that you and she
    my dearest friend has fallen inlove with you
    you won the prize that's why i'm so blue

    I had stopped crying and i thought i did
    but when i saw you, hell i'm a freak
    i felt stupid wating for nothing
    everything crumbled and broke into pieces

    another year but no more tears
    Finally, my love for you has ended
    I'll take another step to move on
    to leave you behind my past...at last


    "Never tell a man that you love him until he has declared his undying love for you."

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    Re: At last...

    Nice and sad poem hope to see more. Smile for all. It was awesome in my way.
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    Re: At last...

    Sweet poem it told the story of a broken heart very well. Keep up the good work.
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    Sad poem, just like a typical breakup but in the end you did a nice job explaining everything . Very good!
    But hey! I got my 2000th post in your poem! xD

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    Re: At last...

    This is a wonderful poem... I really like it!!! It's wonderful how you express your feelings, I even feel a little bit of anvy (in a good way) I felt for the lyrical "me" with all my heart and I was truly happy to read the last stanza where she says that she's over it... It expresses some of my feelings... Wonderful!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    What a sad and sweet poem. You are a great poet. Hope to see more from you.

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