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| View Poll Results: poem of a beginner poet.is it good? | |||
| yes. | | 17 | 77.27% |
| no. | | 5 | 22.73% |
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![]() Credits: 652 | last good byes( for a freind now gone...) I miss you so much, why you have to go? You left in such a horrible way, the crash the sound the blow. Everyone still crying their hoping it's not true, looking at old photos remembering everything of you. They play that song out loud, tears start flowing from out eyes, as they walk to the casket to say their last good byes.... |
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| Why so serious? | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) Quote:
![]() The last two lines didn't flow too well for me. But the poem overall was very good. Nice work, angel. Keep it up. | |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,490 | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) I have to disagree wit hthe whte wolf, the last two lines made the poem for me. I will not vote on it, because I believe it is not bad nor good.
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![]() Credits: 358 | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) capitalization. I think u have to revise your poem before posting it.. A good poem with good emotions is very catchy.. I like your poem at some point. make more to know your weakness and strength by the comments.. You can do it! =)
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,051 | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) I would wish that it was a bit longer, 3 stanzas doesn't give much to read xD Continue writing! It's a good work. |
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Diamond in the Rough | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) A bit- umn... I don't know... Maybe it's different to me. But I enjoy reciting it -PEACE- lol
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Otaku | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) nice ....very nice i love it ....good work .... When I look at your eyes, I see your true self. I see you're sweet, and caring. I see you're giving and forgiving. I see your love for me. When I look at your eyes I stop myself from crying When I'm alone and think about your eyes I cry. I can't stop thinking that one day I'll never see those eyes again That I'll never see the love or the sweetness Or the love that makes you who you are. One day you'll be gone - gone from me. Gone from this world. No matter what happens, those eyes will one day close And forever rest in peace. But you'll never be completely gone, Because every time I close my eyes, There you will be.
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![]() Credits: 21,010 | Re: last good byes( for a freind now gone...) This poem reminds of someone that i really care for and the poem is very touching in other words i am really interested into i have no problem with it. It has really great feeling into it, it can really inspire anyone with this. |
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