Thread: last good byes( for a freind now gone...)

the crash the sound the blow.

Comma use would be very much appreciated

The last two lines didn't flow too well for me. But the poem overall was very good. Nice work, angel. Keep it up.

I have to disagree wit hthe whte wolf, the last two lines made the poem for me. I will not vote on it, because I believe it is not bad nor good.

capitalization. I think u have to revise your poem before posting it..
A good poem with good emotions is very catchy.. I like your poem
at some point. make more to know your weakness and strength
by the comments.. You can do it! =)

It's ok..last line of the 1st stanza wasn't too good..other than that,there is nothing to comment

I would wish that it was a bit longer, 3 stanzas doesn't give much to read xD
Continue writing! It's a good work.

A bit- umn... I don't know... Maybe it's different to me. But I enjoy reciting it -PEACE- lol

nice ....very nice i love it ....good work ....
When I look at your eyes, I see your true self.
I see you're sweet, and caring.
I see you're giving and forgiving.
I see your love for me.

When I look at your eyes I stop myself from crying
When I'm alone and think about your eyes I cry.
I can't stop thinking that one day I'll never see those eyes again
That I'll never see the love or the sweetness
Or the love that makes you who you are.
One day you'll be gone - gone from me.
Gone from this world.
No matter what happens, those eyes will one day close
And forever rest in peace.

But you'll never be completely gone,
Because every time I close my eyes,
There you will be.